In the cold

By Shannan

Mon, 05 May 2014
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5 comments
 

  In the Cold


  • It’s an ice cold wind

  • Cutting shivers through my bones,

  • Something is not right
Certificate U
Poem
Poetry
Nature

Comments

Submitted by Shannan on

Hi all, I couldn't get the computer to drop to the next line, no matter what I tried! So the dots were the last resort to stop me breaking the computer... indeed, something is not right! Humph

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Like it, Shannan (and never mind about the dots!) Of course if you read it rather quickly you could make it sound 'It's a nice cold wind', with the n moving! Rhiannon
 

 

Submitted by Shannan on

Thanks for the reassurance there Rhiannon :-) True, it could be nice 'n cold. Thanks for the suggestion. Trust all is well your side $

 

Submitted by Bee on

I like this, too. By leaving that last line open you have captured an ominous feeling. The spacing and the dots makes it appear bleak and adds to the cold. 

It might not be your computer . If you are writing poetry in lines straight onto the site it goes into double line spacing. 

Bee

Submitted by Shannan on

Thanks Bee, great to read you again :) I like your dot interpretation - I'll go with it! 

I'm going to try another one - I'll word doc it first this time, that may help. Keep well. $