Reflection in you

Cherry

By edithrose

Sat, 19 Jul 2014
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I saw it, today, for a moment

Fleetingly,

My reflection in you.

 

I saw how I looked in

The love of your wide, stormy eyes

The hunger of your slight upturned mouth

The desire of the almost imperceptible parting of 

 

your lips.

 

And in the exquisite mirror of you,

I saw it. Briefly.

 

I might be beautiful.

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Submitted by Bee on

This is lovely!

Bee

Submitted by edithrose on

Thank you so much! smiley

Submitted by VeraClark on

A vision of self-love and synchronicity beautifully captured, Edithrose. 

 

Submitted by edithrose on

Thank you. I'm glad you got that. smiley

Submitted by Geoff Smith on

I like this very much. Direct and moving. I liked the ending particulary. There are loads of things I love.

And in the exquisite mirror of you,

for example -  I love the idea of our partners somehow being mirrors that perhaps we select to reflect ourselves.

If I were going to change anything it would be this line:

The love of your wide, stormy eyes

Thanks for reading. I am grateful for your time.

Submitted by edithrose on

Thanks Jasper. 

Actually the line about the eyes was the one I had changed over a few times. 

Great feedback, thank you!

Submitted by scratch on

Simple and simply delightful.  That it is simple in no way indicates that it was simple to write.  The simplest things are often the hardest ones too.  I love this edithrose.

 

Submitted by edithrose on

Thank you. That means a lot as I love your writing!

Submitted by Yvonne Anderson on

Lovely spare poem to describe an intimate moment. I found it uplifting, especially the last line

Best wishes. Yvonne

Submitted by edithrose on

I'm glad you found it uplifting...it is sad that the beauty was only seen fleetingly, but heartening that at least it was.

Thank you!

Submitted by Rhiannon Phoenix on

Love this!

 

Submitted by Rhiannon Phoenix on

Love this.

So simple, so pure, so true. 

Submitted by edithrose on

Thank you. I'm glad you felt that. smiley