Small is Beautiful

Cherry

By Silver Spun Sand

Sat, 13 Sep 2014
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15 comments
 
Swear I can see 
right through
your flickering
eyelid...
 
translucent
as a butterfly’s wings,
stutters – soft 
on my cheek
where falls
your baby breath;
 
effervescent 
with escape
as you stretch,
little knowing,
nor caring
 
your birth 
heralds its death...
its spirit flown,
but to where...
 
the small, white moth
gone to dust
on the floor now,
nor from whence
yours came...
 
maybe one
and the same
you and the moth...
 
white as the froth
of milk on your lip
like surf fringes
the crinkly tip
of a shell on the shore;
so small – but so 
perfectly formed.
Certificate PG
Poem
Silver Spun Sand Poems
Spiritual

Comments

Submitted by VeraClark on

Stunning. Very moving and the words so delicately strung together. Floored me quite spectacularly.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Thanks, Vera...much appreciatedsmiley

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Exquisite,you evoke the fragility of life.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Something I had hoped to convey.  I'm pleased, that for you, at least, I did.

Tina

 

Submitted by catherine poarch on

It's beautiful. I like the way you are straight in with 'swear I...' not 'I swear..' It makes it asif you are talking to her, up close, noone else listening. 

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

catherine - thank you for picking up on this; it was a mood I'd aspired to achieve. 

Tina

 

Submitted by Bee on

It wasn't till the end that I realised I had forgotten to breathe whilst reading. Stunning!

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Bee - thanks so much...and I trust you're breathing nowsmiley

Tina

 

Submitted by Bee on

Oops! Thanks for the reminder.

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

This is such a moving poem Tina...I can feel the tears welling up as I write this comment.  So spiritual and sad,  but beautifully written and full of love.

Thank you so much for sharing.

Jenny.  

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Thanks, Jenny, for reading, and love it most certainly is full of.

Tina

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Lovely

Parson Thru

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Appreciatedsmiley

Tina

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Tina,

Yes, 'small but perfectly formed' is how  I would describe y our poem.  Lovely.

Moya

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

HI again, Moya, and I know I'm always thanking you for reading my stuff, but I really so appreciate it.  

'Small but perfectly formed' was how I always described my youngest daughter.  She always had  a thing about her height ( and still has, actually); barely five foot nothing, and her sister towered over her at five foot seven.  I'm somewhere in between at 5ft. 4ins.  which used to be the average height for women in this country, but now it's risen to 5ft. 7ins.  Must be all those five aday we eatsmiley

Hope you're doing OK, by the way. Me and hubby muddle along from day to day,which is all one can do, in all honesty.

Tina