You Said

Cherry

By Bee

Sun, 14 Sep 2014
  • 6823 reads
20 comments
 

You said, Sleep was for sleep
not for tangling
limbs, the entwining 
of arms, the linking
of fingers; interfering of feet.

Not for the snuggling
spooners that nuzzle
the necks with sticky thick lips, 
or the snuffle
of snouts that snort
for scent, or strokers 
of hair, scratchers 

of backs, cuppers 
of breasts and the chafers 
of chests; the twiddlers
of nipples and fiddlers
of bits... Never cared
for affection to enter
your dreams -

you claimed Love was for love
and all to be done
must be done 
to satisfy needs, 

but that after the huff and the puff
and the mess of the stuff,
you must rest in your space
and put barriers up
because Sleep was for sleep,
just as love was for Love -
you believed.

Certificate 18
Poem
Love

Comments

Submitted by celticman on

yes, love is for lovers and sleep is for dreamers.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Nicely put, CM.

Thank you.

Bee

Submitted by hudsonmoon on

Unless your dreaming about sex. In which cas you'd better get the name right if you talk in you sleep. But I'm with Celtic. Let sleeping dogs lie. Wonderful word play here, Deborah. Me like.

Rich

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Rich. Glad you like!

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you, cherry picker. Glad you liked it, too.

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

And well deserved cherries, they are, Bee.  This has to be a favourite amongst my many favourites of yours, Bee.  Beautifully written.

Tina

 

Submitted by Bee on

Tina, what you said was even better than cherries!

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee

I thought this was great. I enjoyed every line.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Jean - glad you did.

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Loved this poem Bee.  All has already been said and congrats on the well deserved cherries.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Pleased you liked. Thanks Jenny.

Bee

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Oh dear, Bee, all I do in bed is sleep and dream of the rest... Nice reminder of what I am missingsmiley

Submitted by Bee on

Some things it's best not to be reminded of. 

Thanks for reading Elsie - and for the smile.

Bee

Submitted by scratch on

Like the assonance and the alliteration very much Bee.  That, allied with the theme brings a particular feeling to this which I like very much.  Well done.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks scratch. Really pleased you appreciated the alliteration. It's something I try to be careful not to go over the top with because I like it so much, but sometimes you just have to let ya hair down, don't you?

Bee

Submitted by scratch on

Y' certainly do, lol.

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

I've forgotten the terminology, Bee, it's early morning here, but all the 'esses' make this a tongue delight.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Vera - so glad you liked them. They do tend to sound ridiculously lispy, though. I usually try to avoid a lot of esses for this reason. I thought about them here - and they seemed so wrong they might be right, so I left um. Glad I did now.

Bee

Submitted by VeraClark on

I've a dreadful lithp, hasn't shut me up yet though.

 

Submitted by Bee on

No, don't ever shut up. I've just read the poem again in the light of lithp appeal and it's had me in stitches. What was I thinking?

Bee