New Shoes?

Cherry

By Silver Spun Sand

Tue, 23 Sep 2014
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Who you staring at Mister, in your posh limousine?
Kerb-crawling’s illegal, so stop hassling me.
So – you’ve wound down the window; so there is life on Mars!
I’d give a king’s ransom for one of them cars.
 
Especially right now; see – me shoes have been nicked.
I hope them who’s pinched ’em they don’t frigging fit!
Thought I’d get some in Oxfam, but some toff threw me out,
and I weren’t doing nothing ’cept lighting a snout.
 
If you don’t mind my saying, them’s posh leather shoes.
Must have you cost you a packet; they still look brand new.
Say – what’s eating you, mate? Ain’t you never seen feet?
Bit grubby, I’ll grant you, but they scrub up a treat.
 
Speaking of which, my beauty sleep beckons;
this bench looks OK – say what you do reckon?
What’s that you’re asking? Nope...I don’t deal in crack;
drugs is a mug’s game, so I learned a while back.
 
Ere, I tell you what, Mister, you’re looking all-in,
see, the place that you’re headed, I’ve already been;
the gutter’s not meant for a nice bloke like you,
so, here, keep your money – new shoes...or no.
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Comments

Submitted by hudsonmoon on

Loved the voice here, Tina  

Rich

 

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Rich - you made my daysmiley

Tina

 

Submitted by scratch on

Oh yes.  Very good, an excellent voice on show.  Rhyme deffinitely works well in this.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Thanks, scratch.  You reminded me of Churchill for a moment...nodding head an' all, and I'm pleased you thought sosmiley

Tina

 

Submitted by Bee on

I like this character and his message. When I first read this piece, I remember thinking it would stick in my mind - and it has.

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Ta, Bee.  Pleased to hear itsmiley

Tina

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Tina,

Yes, the voice is good and reminiscent of one of your other poems that I seem to remember I thought  had a Victorian feel to it.  You show such versatility of style with your poems. I think that is one of the reasons I enjoy them so much.  I can never anticipate how you will take us on the journey from your title

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Thanks, so much, Moyasmiley  I think I know what poem you mean because I remember your reply, but I can't think, for the life of me, what it was called.

So pleased you enjoyed, because this one was a real devil to perfect, and took quite a few years, and some.

Tina