red
By john beckett
Sat, 08 Nov 2014
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Grateful that I knew
enough not to trust her.
So no one was really betrayed
and very little lost when she proved
a false friend. She finally pulled
out her dull knife and carved me
an end to all this wandering.
Did she care? No, she just wanted to
see me bleed. It’s red.
Are you satisfied now?
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Really intense writing. Very
Permalink Submitted by Parson Thru on
Really intense writing. Very personal and powerful. I find the loose structure pleasing to read.
Parson Thru
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World weary tone is very
Permalink Submitted by Philip Sidney on
World weary tone is very effective.
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Yep, does it for me too.
Yep, does it for me too. Parson's observation about the structure is spot on and personally I'd go the rest of the way and get rid of the capitalisation. Really good pome.
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