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Cherry

By john beckett

Sat, 08 Nov 2014
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3 comments
 

Grateful that I knew

enough not to trust her.

So no one was really betrayed

and very little lost when she proved

a false friend.  She finally pulled

out her dull knife and carved me

an end to all this wandering.

Did she care?  No, she just wanted to

see me bleed. It’s red.

 Are you satisfied now?

Certificate U
Poem
Romance
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Love

Comments

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Really intense writing. Very personal and powerful. I find the loose structure pleasing to read.

Parson Thru

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

World weary tone is very effective.

Submitted by scratch on

Yep, does it for me too.  Parson's observation about the structure is spot on and personally I'd go the rest of the way and get rid of the capitalisation.  Really good pome.