Release! (IP)

By Rhiannonw

Mon, 12 Jan 2015
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10 comments
 

“Held in futile folly
– but not against my will –
happy in the misery,
bound blind,
no wish to break away
until –
awakened to discerning mind,
disgust, desire
for something better,
– I’d had my fill
of deadly wrong,
but find the shackling fetter
now holds against my will,
too strong
– until
a greater might
(which had implanted light)
takes hold of mine, and so
leads out by hand,        
for it can fracture, shatter
the gripping fetter,
the binding band,
and life and power to persevere bestow,
and greater satisfaction know.”

[IP: 'held against their will']

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Comments

Submitted by Bee on

Works so well, sounding heartfelt and beautifully worded. 

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Bee, glad you thought so. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by prettyrose on

smileyHi Rhiannonw, I hope your well. As I said I agree with how you beautifully worded your poem and just perfectly took me along.I did at first think it was a person in a relationship finally realizing there is more to life than being unhappy, but then I woke up lol, it was a long night last night and still feeling the effects:)

 

Good Luck With IP. :)

 

Brilliant well done.

 

 

Take care

 

Trish :)

smiley Keep Smiling

Keep Writing xxx

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you Pretty Rose. Are you still having difficult nights? Nice to hear from you.
The poem is about being 'happy' without God, and not realising the emptiness of all that is meant to be fun, and then waking up and wanting to value right things, but needing God's help to break away from wrong habits and bad ways. And that he can strengthen and help to do it, just as he can first give the desire to change. warm regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by prettyrose on

smileyI appreciate you telling me, and it was not because how you wrote it, but more that yes still having bad nights&most days, but thank you :) And loved this even more now!!!!

 

Take care

 

Trish :)

smiley Keep Smiling

Keep Writing xxx

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

So sorry you have so much pain and trouble, and pray you have some comfort and encouragement, especially at night. warm regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Geoff Smith on

I'm pleased that I read this as you intended. I really like the inversion on the final line which has a really hymn-like quality.

Thanks for reading. I am grateful for your time.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Geoff, glad it worked. I hadn't realised that about the last line, but do like inversions sometimes, maybe because i am used to writing hymns aswell! Rhiannon

http://rhiannonshymns.co.uk/

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

I too liked this poem very much, and   I realised your intent in writing it. It makes a very strong statement for the need for help from above.

Jean
 

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you very much, Jean. I'm glad you found it so. regards, Rhiannon