Release! (IP)
By Rhiannonw
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“Held in futile folly
– but not against my will –
happy in the misery,
bound blind,
no wish to break away
until –
awakened to discerning mind,
disgust, desire
for something better,
– I’d had my fill
of deadly wrong,
but find the shackling fetter
now holds against my will,
too strong
– until
a greater might
(which had implanted light)
takes hold of mine, and so
leads out by hand,
for it can fracture, shatter
the gripping fetter,
the binding band,
and life and power to persevere bestow,
and greater satisfaction know.”
[IP: 'held against their will']
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Works so well, and
Works so well, sounding heartfelt and beautifully worded.
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I agree With Bee, :)
Hi Rhiannonw, I hope your well. As I said I agree with how you beautifully worded your poem and just perfectly took me along.I did at first think it was a person in a relationship finally realizing there is more to life than being unhappy, but then I woke up lol, it was a long night last night and still feeling the effects:)
Good Luck With IP. :)
Brilliant well done.
Take care
Trish :)
Keep Smiling
Keep Writing xxx
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Arr Thank You :)
I appreciate you telling me, and it was not because how you wrote it, but more that yes still having bad nights&most days, but thank you :) And loved this even more now!!!!
Take care
Trish :)
Keep Smiling
Keep Writing xxx
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I'm pleased that I read this
I'm pleased that I read this as you intended. I really like the inversion on the final line which has a really hymn-like quality.
Thanks for reading. I am grateful for your time.
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Hi Rhiannon
Hi Rhiannon
I too liked this poem very much, and I realised your intent in writing it. It makes a very strong statement for the need for help from above.
Jean
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