Lodestone

Cherry

By celticman

Sat, 31 Jan 2015
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17 comments
 

“Woke Up This Morning”

All sparse littered landmarks gone.

All sparse littered landmarks grown.

Trudging among missing standing stones.

Trudging along ‘n’ missing standing alone.

Little boys and girls must not mix.

Little boys and girls must not kick!

The main entrance I long ago climbed.

The main entrance long ago in bygone time.

A beautiful building strongly classical.

A beautiful building strongly farcical.

Misshapen fragments of broken gable.

Misshapen fragments of times-tables.

Rusty padlock, two arms of retaining beam.

Rusty padlock, two arms and retaining screams.

High double-doors emptiness lies behind.

High double-doors emptiness lies in our kind.

Past bulldozed out of sight.

Past bulldozed, yet might.

Pacing the emptiness was not enough.

Pacing the emptiness of our turf.

The site was silent.

The site was violent.

 

Something in the dismal remains.

Here at last a piece of my past still wanes.

Take the stand of reason alone.

Take the stand on reason shown.

How willingly we ache.

How willingly we forsake.

Where the lodestone to point to you?

Where the lodestone to point true?

Childhood dreams of destruction.

Adult dreams of construction.

“Woke up this morning”.

 

Certificate PG
Poem

Comments

Submitted by celticman on

competition entry. 

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Sing'n the blues.

Submitted by celticman on

yeh, philip. get your entries in. Let's get rolling along. I'm putting you and Nooo as firm favourties for this one. 

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

But where is the button...?

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

can you all see the button now?

 

Submitted by celticman on

the button is in the competion blog. When you scroll down options you'll need to click on flag and tick the box 'in competion'. [You should mention this on your page insert]

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

"Entries must select the 'competition' box in the genre section" 

 

I already did! That's what you meant - right?

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

I can't find competition in the genre drop down box. Where is it?

 

Submitted by celticman on

yeh, I'd that problem too. It's not in genre box. You need to go to the menu below and click on the box that says 'Flags'. 

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

ok, I've changed it. How does that look now?

 

Entries must select "add to competition" in the flags section and cannot be accepted without payment.

 

Thank you celticman! xx

 

Submitted by celticman on

Nope. Get your most important information in first. Entries will not be judged unless payment is made (access via Paypal button below). Competition enteries should use the drop-down menus for story and poems in the usual way. Lookout for 'Flags' (below 'Who can view this post?'). Click on 'Flags' and an onscreen-dialogue box appears. Click on 'Competion entry'. 'Save' in the usual way. And that's you a winner! 

 

Submitted by jeand on

HI CM

All these comments, and nobody bothered to mention what a terrific poem it is. I like the format you used - with the two similar statements telling the past and present. Great stuff. Good luck with it.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by celticman on

thanks jean, appreciated. 

 

Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on

An interesting and memorable format. 'The site was silent ---The site was violent'. Very powerful.

Linda

Submitted by celticman on

forgot I wrote this Linda. The name was familiar. Thanks for reminding me. 

 

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

CM, out of the 6 winning entries this is my favourite. I feel you have exemplified what good poetry should do namely to write about an experience or set of experiences in a way that the reader can imagine and feel in a shape that is recognisably poetry. Easier said than done and you have done yourself proudsmiley

Submitted by celticman on

thanks guys, surprised to be selected to get a cherry never mind a prize.