Déjà vu

Cherry

By Bee

Fri, 06 Mar 2015
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18 comments
 

Woke up this morning wondering if it was our wedding day, or not. Just yesterday, he seemed distracted; refused to look me in the eye - or search for the rings he'd somehow lost since taking them to the shop to be polished. Wouldn't even speak, except to catapult accusations regarding past, and likely future failures. He'd find the bloody rings when he was good and ready. And me, I had a funny feeling I knew where this was heading.

Home alone, I laid out the dress - (just in case), then went to bed and dreamt of a love less uncertain. Woke up this morning, like I said, wondering... didn't touch the dress, but put on jeans instead, and waited.

He phoned as expected, with a list of lame excuses, and I hung up content to call it a day. But he was back by evening - prostrate with flamboyant guilt, stuttered apologies, silly card with too many kisses in it - flowers. He'd even booked the registry office incase I could be persuaded.

Time will fly, as perhaps should I - but that never happens, for some reason... I will, I'll say, and so will he - for better or for worse - again. 

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Comments

Submitted by RJF on

An interesting story Bee, enojyed reading. Rx

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks R. Glad you enjoyed it.

Bee

Submitted by tibi popovici on

"re-polished" rings make me think it's not the first wedding, therefore everything can be match with the uncertainty of that decision, to get married again, where the title comes into the role. Very well written, Bee.

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks tibi - that's helpful. 

Bee

Submitted by Ed Crane on

It's just so darn sad. Perfectly written of course. I think the thing that makes me sad about this is the never ending hopelessness of the writer, seemingly trapped in a circle of love and the fear of losing it.

Very sensitively written piece.Good luck in the comp.

Ed xx

 

Submitted by Bee on

Sorry Ed, on sad again. Really pleased with your comments, though. I keep looking out for your piece for the competition. Hope it's coming along well. 

Thanks so much for reading.

Xx

Bee

Submitted by Ed Crane on

I do a bit each day as time permits, and of course I keep re-writing bits, which slows things down. I think I still have a couple of weeks to get it right.

Don't laugh, but mine is sad also crying

Ed (K) x

 

Submitted by Bee on

Haha! It's being so sad that keeps us cheerful!

Keep writing and re-writing...

BeeDX

ps. I've got one more, and guess what? Yep - sad.

Bee

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Hi Bee. So much sorrow and sadness. Lost dreams are a terrible thing, but this one just hangs and hangs. Nicely wrought.

Parson Thru

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks PT. 

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

HI Bee

Yes it is sad, and yet understandable. She knows she's going to be disappointed, but keeps hoping and trying for better things.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks so much, Jean.

Bee

Submitted by torscot on

Nice one Bee.

May I suggest Gretna Green for a venue.

You can always get Celticman to play the bagpipes.

Regards

torscot

Submitted by Bee on

Good thinking. Thanks torscot.

Bee

Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on

A sad little tale, well 'polished' by you into a beautiful gem.

Linda

Submitted by Bee on

Ah thanks Linda. 

Bee

Submitted by Geoff Smith on

The prose poem is difficult. But this is clearly poetic, and as Bear says, you've managed the rhythm very effectively. It's sad, but weirdly optimistic at the end.

Thanks for reading. I am grateful for your time.

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Geoff, that's encouraging.  I liked your interpretation of the end - either, as you say, optimistic, or accepting the process is about to happen again?

Bee