Down in the Valley

Cherry

By Bee

Wed, 29 Apr 2015
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13 comments
 

The need to live
won't stop me
feeling suicidal,

for instance, 
fear of facing death
only wakes the will to live.

It doesn't take away
the lack of something
real to live for,

or fill the emptiness,
or take away the hopelessness 
of what we are about to face.

Looking down into that valley,
my fear warns me to stand,
and while my waning courage

urges me to jump
into the darkness,
deep inside my soul

I know I won't;
I wouldn't be allowed to
go out, flying in the face of love.

Certificate 15
Poem

Comments

Submitted by catherine poarch on

This seems not just a beautiful but a gutsy poem. The last line filled me with hope somehow. xx

 

 

Submitted by Bee on

Hope is a powerful thing to hold on to. Thank you, Catherine.

x

Bee

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Bee, you have highlighted beautifully our rather perverse feelings about living and dying. Some of us are fortunate to have a face of love to fly into or at least it's visible to us. Lovely piece x

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you for your lovely comments, Jane.

x

Bee

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

You confront real feelings and deal with them in this, ultimately, hopeful poem.  Important things said.

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Philip - that means a lot.

And thanks for those cherries.

Bee

Submitted by Ed Crane on

 

 

Submitted by Ed Crane on

In this poem, not least it touched me on a very personal basis this past weekend. Luckily I can breath a big sigh and tell myself all's well that ends well, but the line

fear of facing death
only wakes the will to live.

is very poignent not just for me, but for all living creatures.

Thanks

Ed x

 

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Ed.

I'm so glad you got to breathe that wonderful sigh. Keep reminding yourself that everything is ok. Worries have a habit of sticking to us even after the need is over.

Deb xxx

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

The sense of the possibility or being of some use to someone else sometime is what helps to renew a sense of purpose, something to live for, isn't it? and as you seem to end, some sense of others' love, – and maybe of God's love? Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Rhiannon. So much to think about in your thoughtful comments here. More than you know.

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee

Beautiful and very poignant. Most of us can relate to it in some way. And Hope is a very important part of existence, and I do believe in miracles - with good reason to.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Jean, your kind words mean so much.

x

Bee