Catching the eye

By Rhiannonw

Fri, 01 May 2015
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11 comments
 

Patchwork views
of greeny hues –
blot on the landscape,
gaudy rape;
verge splash
– stitchwort stars bright,
tippex-white,
forget-me-not haze,
dandelions ablaze;
fruit of the elm –
green circles of film,
seed wings in bunches,
decorate bare branches –
looking up through,
patterns on the blue;
drooping chestnut leaves,
newly hatched, limply lie
to inflate, billow up
like wings of a butterfly.

 

Certificate U
Poem
Countryside explorations
Nature

Comments

Submitted by hilary west on

I really like this one, Rhiannon. with its sense of rhyme and half rhyme. It's a gem!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Glad you enjoyed, Hilary. Thank you. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

A colorful patchwork in full Spring glory. You paint with words, Rhiannon. Loved the rhyme - very fitting, and beautiful description.

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Bee. Glad you enjoyed. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Patchwork of the countryside, lovely, makes me want to go out!

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Good, I hope you can soon! Glad you enjoyed my few images, thanks. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

Lovely poem, but I was surprised you used blot on the landscape. Don't you like gaudy rape? I do.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jean. I am getting used to rape, and its bright colour (and high scent), but it still seems a bit odd and alien in the scenery round here, somehow a bit continental, so I feel many do still think of it as a blot, but maybe now a blot with its own beauty?! and of course it must have economic value to the farmers. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

I think it's pretty and catches the light making such a vivid splash, but I knew what you meant. This conversation is looking quite funny now, and I have to remind myself we are talking about a flower here.

Bee

Submitted by torscot on

I enjoy reading your nature tales  Rhiannonw.

Visual and theraputic

torscot

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Toscot, that's really good to know! Rhiannon