If only

By Deliberately Evolving

Tue, 02 Jun 2015
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10 comments
 
 
If you would only hold me 
with your arms 
wrapped tightly round me, 
I think our problems might just fall
away - eventually.
Every ill would disappear,
if it were only you and me.
In a world of our own,
cocooned in your arms - 
I am home.
Certificate U
Poem
Romance

Comments

Submitted by socialeaf on

Lovely though sad. It should all be so much simpler.

 

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thanks SL. It is sad that it can't be so simple. We yearn for love so pure and without complication. 

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Pat G on

If only it could be... A beautiful thought captured perfectly.

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thanks Pat. If only indeed. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

So often we want to talk things out, when holding shows we want to be at peace, even if we can't sort out the misunderstaning/irritation/confusion/hurt verbally. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

That's a really interesting insight into the poem. Thank you Rhiannon.

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by tibi popovici on

Like the clear line between the goods and bads into a marriage, at the end the comfort of home prevails.

T.

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thanks TP. You are right, there is comfort in the familiar. Thanks for talking the time to comment.

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by rayjones on

Holding means you won't let go that means a lot,in fact everything, your poem lays it right out there, really good

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thanks Ray. And you are right - it makes a big difference.

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.