Two Years

Cherry

By Bee

Sun, 07 Jun 2015
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TWO YEARS

isn't enough to watch her grow

into the woman I imagine she'll become.

The babe, a man I predict to be calm - attentive -

oh, to never see his great potential achieved...



Then she with the hair that billows in the wind

will dance backlit by the sun, unseen by me,

and the boy with the shimmering curls 

will dazzle the world long after I'm gone.



The child with the cat-green eyes, born wise

before his time is young enough to forget me. 

But somehow, I'll remember each of them by lingering

in their hope filled hearts for as long as I'm allowed.

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Comments

Submitted by Starfish Girl on

Goose bumps!

So much to read into this, and the images are beautiful.

A great feeling of life and death about it.

Lindy

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Lindy. I'm trying to collect some poems to have enough to choose from for a pamphlet, so your comments on the poem are really helpful. Thank you so much.

x

Bee

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

I like the perspective here, projecting into the future and considering the present, lots of layers, personal and distant at the same time.  Good luck with the pamphlet!

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Philip.

Bee

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

another wonderful addition to your collection. It feels a little like you're shaking a kaleidescope each time - telling us what you see

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks insert - that's really nice. 

Bee

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Everything that shapes us as people happens with those closest to us in our precious early years. You will remain with them forever or until you meet again. 

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Bee on

That's just lovely. Thanks AE.

x

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks for the lovely cherries!smiley

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee

Beautifully said - and a lovely thought - " lingering in their hope filled hearts."

And think of all the people who have been touched and helped by your words over the years. Good luck with the pamphlet. 

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Jean.

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Hi, Bee. We're none of us guaranteed our tomorrows here. A privilege to have known them, and had an opportunity to pray for them. You have an obvious love for them, which they are aware of and will always remember, while they see you and beyond. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Rhiannon.

Bee

Submitted by love_writing on

So poignant and touching...some wonderful descriptions too with  'hair that billows in the wind will dance backlit by the sun' - that gave me both a vivid picture ...and those goosebumps 

love_writing

Submitted by Bee on

Sorry I missed this comment before, LW. But if you see this, thank you so much.

Bee