Sleep Walking

Gold cherry

By Ed Crane

Fri, 21 Aug 2015
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Breathing my breaths day and

night. Little puffs to stay alive.

Living life in peace and relative

Western comfort with smart

phones, multichannel tee-vee.

Watching virtual war-games

streamed to the computer for

prizes, dealing with life’s little

problems; income-tax the price

of milk or potatoes and it feels

like being at a picnic on a magic

summer day with azure above,

studiously ignoring the biggest

Cumulus Nimbi ever known on  

every horizon encircling, clearly

intent on spoiling the party and

we sip our Chardonnay, seeing

no point in bringing an umbrella

Certificate PG
Poem
Opinion

Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

This reminds me of the children's song chorus 'Row, row your boat, gently down the stream, merrily, merrily, merrily, merrily, life is but a dream.'  – which I always found very irritating! though the verses were fun. Rhiannon

 

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Submitted by Bee on

In the face of impending doom we bury our heads in the sand and worry about trivialities, because we can do nothing about the bigger picure, except feel oddly guilty for self imposed ignorance by necessity. Probably over thinking - but then, I do. And this is a great poem with beautiful and atmospheric imagery.

x

Bee

Submitted by Ed Crane on

In fact your comment has helped me improve the last two lines.

Thanks

Ed x

 

Submitted by Bee on

I like the flow of that ending, Ed. After - 'studiously ignoring the biggest Cumulus Nimbi ever known...' It also shows that the lack of an umbrella is no mistake, but a decision based on obsevation. Now where's that Chardonnay ? I need one. 

Bee

Submitted by Ed Crane on

However I am having second thoughts after I remembered seeing a documentory about the upper middle class elite in Germany in the thirties, gaily having fun thinking they were immune to changes by the impending "government."

Perhaps not bothering with an umbrella is more apt .... need to think about that.

 

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Submitted by scratch on

I loved this when you first posted it, Ed.  Deserves its recognition as pick of the day.

 

Submitted by Ed Crane on

Insert and scratch. Quite a surprise, but a nice one. Thaanks again!

Ed C

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Ed...deserved of its accolades...more thansmiley  

Tina

 

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