Breathed - (poetry monthly)

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Poem of the week

By Bee

Fri, 13 Nov 2015
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I'm posting this today for Steve, who passed away a week last Friday. It was badly recorded in a friend's son's bedroom a couple of years ago after Steve gave me a few chords and the words of the song he had been playing around with on and off for some time but getting nowhere with, I came up with this, and when I gave it to him he said it was nothing like what he had in mind, but was thrilled with it anyway. Trouble was, I think it may have knocked his own inspiration out of the window coz he never did finish his own version of the song. His funeral is today. 

RIP dear friend x

https://youtu.be/WebqlitPsso

 

Breathed - with words by Stephen Ward - (Mango the Chutneyman) 

When breathing gets difficult 

and sleeping impossible

you know it's time for you to get back on the dirt track

to where you lost your mind

in the gaze of her eyes

in her fragile smile and get in with your life

before you fade and are lost forever

you'd better pull yourself together

and get on with your life



Thought I saw you steal a glance

then look away again 

Thought I heard you whisper we could be more than friends

Didn't you reach inside of me

and take my breath away

or has my imagination let me down again?



Breathe life into me

You breathed life into me

You breathed life into me -

You came to me 

and you breathed... 



Now I'm missing you every day

they tell me life goes on

I'm a little boat who's lost his way - just drifting along

No I won't curl up and die

May even try to smile

Though there's sadness behind my smile

I was breathless for a while



But you breathed life into me

You breathed life into me

You breathed life into me

You came to me

and you breathed



Won't you come back 

and breathe

again

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Comments

Submitted by VeraClark on

Sorry for the loss of a dear friend, Bee.I hope the service is fitting somehow for his greatness. Can't listen yet as Beef asleep but the way you use breathed has a hypnotic effect, the sequence is characteristic of breathing. A soothing one in sound but emotional content contradicts it

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Vera. The words are Steve's though rearranged by me for the song - repeats and layout, etc. The 'breathed' just seems so fitting right now. 

Sounds like you should sleep, too.

x

Thanks for the cherries.

Bee

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

beautifully done bee - and yes, very fitting for the day. Will you be singing it at the funeral?

typo:

or has my imagination let me town again?

 

Submitted by Bee on

No. Won't be singing. I'd only blub in the middle probably. Thanks for correction.

Bee

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

So very beautiful, everyone who hears this haunting song will think of Steve.

Submitted by Bee on

I really hope so thank you so much Philip. 

Bee

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Beautiful words, Bee. Sorry to hear about the loss of a dear friend. They're never more than a thought away.

Parson Thru

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Just listened to the song. Was about to share it with friends on Facebook but thought to ask if you mind first. It's so beautiful. Stood the hairs up on my neck.

Parson Thru

Submitted by Bee on

I don't mind at all. Thank you for your lovely comments, pt.

x

Bee

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Very poignant Bee and a lovely tribute to your departed friend.
Your talent shines in the recorded version of the song and I also loved the illustration. Well done.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks so much, Luigi. Pleased you thought it worked as a tribute. 

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Bee, what a talanted lady you are, listening to that music brought a tear to my eye. This is such a wonderful tribute to your friend Steve. I do hope the funeral goes okay. The words are like a prayer and sung with such feeling and emotion. Beautifully done.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Jenny.

Glad you liked it. The funeral was just about perfect. Just as he would have wanted it. 

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Beautiful singing voice, Bee.

The content seems to touch on how when friendship shouldn't slide further, there can be strength for it to yield something very mutually enriching instead. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Think you could be right about friendship. Thanks Rhiannon. 

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Bee, so very beautiful, and as Parson says, 'He will never be more than a thought away'.  

Thinking of you.

Tina

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you Tina.

Bee

Submitted by hudsonmoon on

Tender and moving, Deborah. Wonderful interperetation. He must have been happy to hear it. I almost didn't want to listen just yet. But I had to. I do find a kind of solace in the sadness. It helps me stay in touch with my own feelings instead of burying them with frivilous distractions. You've a lovely voice and did the lyrics an incredible justice. Think of you often. 'Never more than a thought away,' as Tina quoted.

Much love to you,

Rich x

 

Submitted by Bee on

Dear Rich, 

i so get that avoiding certain types of music and songs which do bring out emotions we wish to keep down. I spent years not listening to all my favourite music for just that reason. All I can say is, thank you for listening to mine. It means so much that you did, especially as your songs and videos are such an inspiration and cheer here on this site. 

I think of you too.

Love Deborah xxx

 

Bee

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Congratulations on the Poem of the Week accolade. Well deserved.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Luigi!

x

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

I'm so thrilled about this - Steve's poem got pick of the week on the day of his funeral! Very much appreciated. Thank you, it really means so much.

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Bee,

just popped in to say more than congratulations on the poem of the week, so well deserved.

I'm so glad the funeral went well.

Wishing you much Health and Happiness.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Jenny.

x

Bee

Submitted by celticman on

we're all little boats, islands of ourselves, drifting along, but that's a mighty nice song.

 

Submitted by Bee on

We are. Thanks CM.

Bee

Submitted by london_calling79 on

Wow. Just wow. Fitting tribute.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks LC. 

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee

What a beautiful song, and a fitting tribute for your friend.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you Jean. I'm really pleased you thought so. 

Bee

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