Nocturne

Cherry

By luigi_pagano

Fri, 27 Nov 2015
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16 comments
 

Now that winter’s here, at sundown
the light quickly fades and the dark
soon descends on the whole town.
The landscape, at night, looks stark.

Trees are like stalagmites in the park,
rising, reaching for the cloudless sky,
where Alpha Centauri made its mark
being the brightest object to the eye.

Myth has it that a centaur that died
was placed among the stars by Zeus
whilst Deianeira for Heracles cried,
and in Olympus all hell broke loose.

The tears that she shed have become
constellations on the celestial sphere
and their names are familiar to some
who recognise them from down here.

There are fireworks in the firmament
as meteors combust, fizzle and burn.
The darkness on earth is only transient:
when dawn arrives the light will return.

© Luigi Pagano 2015

Certificate U
Poem
Mutevoli pensieri
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Your skill with rhythm and rhyme make this a very pleasant read, Luigi. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Your appreciation of rhyming is music to my ears, Rhiannon. The free form seems to be preferred by many on this site but I believe that rhymes, if not deliberately forced, can produce some good results.
I take this opportunity to congratulate you on your newly acquired skill in reading your poetry. Well done.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

Beautiful - loved it!

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

You have made my day, insert., and thanks for the cherries.

Best, Luigi

 

Submitted by Bee on

This is wonderful, Luigi. 

x

Bee

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

I am very pleased that this attempt at I.P. hit the right note and that your opinion confirms it, Bee. Many thanks.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Luigi - this is beautiful and it shinessmiley.  Some wonderful imagery along with the informative detail you invariably  treat your readers to, which is the very hallmark of much of your splendid work.

Very much enjoyed and well done on the more than deserved fruit.

Tina

 

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Dear Tina, you are always generous in your praise and I am flattered by your kind words. Thanks.

Luigi xxx

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

What a beautiful poem.

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Oh, thanks Helen. Overwhelmed by your response.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

This is magnificent Luigi,

your descriptions and information within the poem was so beautiful...especially the bit about Deianeira's tears becoming constellations on the celestial sphere.

Well deserved of the cherries.

Jenny. xx

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Dear Jenny, your feedback is just what I need and it's a boost to my morale. I find mythology, of whichever civilisation, a great source of inspiration and occasionally incorporate some legend into my poetry.
I thank you warmly for following my work.

Luigi xx

 

 

Submitted by loquaciousicity on

Supernal!

What else...

smiley

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

What else, but thank you Terry.

Luigi yes

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

This is gorgeous, Luigi. A night sky trip with lustrous language to match.

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Delighted that you think so, Ray.

Luigi x