Man of Iron

By skinner_jennifer

Sun, 13 Mar 2016
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11 comments
 

From out

of the earth

was forged

a blade

like no other,

born of many forms: steeped in mystery,

fusing metal to metal;

molten energy

with velocity

of heat –

a furnace

to be

reckoned

with,

for a brief

moment

I watched

as a

sword

was born.

Iron Man's appearance congenial, but deep inside with sinewy brawn,

lies an energetic; diligent force, he's ready for action – blood boiling

with passion, like red hot embers; heat increases running through

veins – profoundly

admired; linked

with his people

to defend,

shielding

from

danger

should

an

enemy

approach,

heavy

sound

of

impact,

as

pound

on

pound

forms

shape:

powerful

strength

needed;

each

strike

rouses

next,

his

burly

muscles

hunker

down,

before

Sleep

under

harvest

m

o

o

n

 

 

 

 

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Submitted by celticman on

you wield the sword of truth with all your might, but rignt now I'm in flight, so I'll just say I enjoyed, but then again I need to think of a word that starts like a mighty sword and ends in pen. 

 

Submitted by loquaciousicity on

intricate chemistry in producing a fine sword.... 

the product of many minds... for the death of many more...

Nice poem... and to the point...smiley

Terry

Submitted by hilary west on

Hi, Jenny

This made me think of the forging of the sword Excalibur. All the strength of that burly male is in there and the pattern of words is fantastic. In the forging of a sword is the making of a clever poem!

Best Wishes,

HW  smiley

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Ha! Ha! Your comment as always puts a smile on my face. Thanks for reading Jack and letting me know your thoughts.

Jenny. smiley

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Terry,

I loved that you really got to the point of this poem...pardon the pun! I think the iron age was most definitely an age to be reckoned with, the people were so strong of body, mind and spirit.  My hope of hopes is that somewhere along the line they were my ancestors, I would be so proud to think they were.

Many thanks for letting me know you enjoyed.

Jenny. smiley

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi HIlary,

love your idea of forging the sword Excalibur and you've made my day with your thoughts.

I did try to shape the words into a sword, but wasn't sure readers would get it, so many thanks for the comment.

I've been reading up about the iron age people and found it so interesting, I just had to give this poem a go.

Again many thanks.

Jenny. smiley

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Bear, great to hear from you and I love that you liked my poem.

The blade and tip were the hardest part to get the right shape and I know it's not perfect, but I'm happy with the way it turned out eventually. Just absolutely love swords, would love to own one, but I have a fear of sharp objects, so I wouldn't buy one. Not sure about the mass produced swords, but an original I might just cope with.

Many thanks for letting me know your thoughts and for reading.

Jenny. smiley

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Reminds me of watching blacksmiths at work, working with the heat and strength. And the willingness to defend neighbours and loved ones from attack.

Reminded me also of a Bible verse that admiration should be even greater for the strength needed for  patience, and self-control over provoked temper! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rhiannon,

it was good to hear from you and your interpretation of this poem. The blacksmith certainly did need to be strong and fit to cope with the heavy work involved.

I've been reading up about the Iron Age people that were living in a hill fort in Dorset, called Maiden Castle. It's massive and the only people that were able to take down their defences were the Romans. It's so sad to think of all the hard work the Iron Age people went to build this huge settlement, only for it to be invaded and taken over by the Romans, very sad indeed.

I do so admire how these people worked so hard to build such a huge fort and I might even write another poem about them, we'll have to see where my imagination can take me.

Many thanks again for your thoughts and for reading, always appreciated.

Jenny. smiley

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

This is such a fabulous poem Jenny.  A treat for the senses.  Not only in its words but in its anvil-like layout.  Very clever, all round, and I thoroughly enjoed reading it.  

Have a good week.  We have a chilly wind blowing here, but hopefully it will dry my washingsmiley

Tina

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Thanks for reading Tina, I'm glad you liked the poem and the layout. Appreciate you letting me know too.

Jenny. smiley