Coffee Moon Haiku Set

By seannelson

Fri, 12 Aug 2016
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The late evening
sky-line smoulders a smoky
Parisian purple
 
outside, a night man
ambles up the wide avenue
like a cat with shoes...
 
as a harvest moon
hangs over his coat-clad shoulders
to read his musings
 
 
Certificate U
Poem

Comments

Submitted by VeraClark on

 I love this,but feel you repeat the same sounds from verse one to three.Feel it reduces impact. Do say if it is deliberate.

 

Submitted by maisie on

thank you.  I love the haiku.. and the tanka greatly :) 

maisie angel Guess what?  I'm still alive!