Autumn Tingeing

By Rhiannonw

Thu, 13 Oct 2016
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Sunshine glints
on autumn tints:
rust and red and yellow
are touched, with hints
of coming winter’s 
fingerprints;

through tear in grey
the searchlights beam
down on the autumn scene.

Certificate U
Poem
Nature
Nature

Comments

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

This is a lovely little poem. I do like the colours of autumn, and look forward to the pretty trees, which are just starting to show their colours around here.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

thanks, Jean. A few trees 'took me by surprise' yesterday, and were a delight. And the view coming over the hill of the 'searchlights' down on the plain ahead. I didn't have a camera, but thought it good to capture the scenes in words! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

I was so drawn to this poem Rhiannon as it's my favourite time of the year. You've captured everything about the season and the golden colours that touch us all.

Beautifully done.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jenny. That's nice to hear. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

delicate description. really like the idea of a sunbeam being a tear in the grey

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Di. I pondered - the briefer you are the more each word has to be weighed and clear in meaning! - and decided to change 'have' to 'are' in line four! Rhiannon