Peeping at the Borrowed Plumes

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Thu, 07 Dec 2017
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7 comments
 

Footsteps, voices echo in the hall,
Mam and Dad are going to the ball,
with Grandad, Gran and Auntie Sue
– let’s peep through the banisters for a view
of glittering jewels on sparkling dress,
jackets and waistcoats made to impress –
borrowed from the actors’ vintage collection,
bedecked for a night for this special invitation.
Oh, I’d love to draw and sew, design
dresses like that, which swish, swirl and shine!

[Poetry Monthly: Voices echo in the hallway]
 

Certificate U
Poetry Monthly
Families
Children's

Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks for the cherries! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

A vivid image of childrens peeping through the banisters - perhaps in contravention of their parents order - and being impressed by the unusual and colourful attire of their relations.
Well done on the cherries, Rhiannon.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Luigi. I started off thinking of the richly dressed of long ago, and then thought it would be fun to bring it down more modern, as such dresses are hired or borrowed for balls, or 'vintage dress' balls. And, of course, yes, the children would be thought to be settling, or settled! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by agnosticnun on

Sweet and lovely. I love that the narrator admires the artistry of the dresses and wants to make them, instead of wishing to emulate the wearers. 

Kristi

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, and yes, I felt so, too. Though I did want to concentrate on the memorial, living-museum aspect rather than just personal ostentation! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by celticman on

nicely done, very visual and acoustic. 

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks very much, Celt, appreciate your comment. Rhiannon