A Disturbing Sleep!

Cherry

By Denzella

Sat, 27 Jan 2018
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I must learn to read things properly.  I read the flash fiction comp as 50 words so here is my 50-word offering.

A Disturbing Sleep!

Laura opened her eyes and stretched contentedly,

‘Richard, those anti-depressants make me sleep really well. Better if I hadn’t had that horrible dream again though.’

When there was no answer she turned to face her husband. There was a 15- inch blade embedded in his chest.

 

 

 

Certificate 15
Story
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Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

I love this Denzella. Amazing what you can fit into so few words, isn't it!  You do know it's not our competition, right? Good luck, and let us know how you get on!

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Insert,

Thank you for the read and the cement.  I mean comment.   It is amazing how few words are needed to get the bare bones of a story. Unfortunately, I have a problem with brevity because I always seem to take the view why use one word when ten will do.  Thank you anyway.  Those last three words or rather last two words would probably have been sufficient but all the extra words would have felt left out and that wouldl be just too cruel.  Now you can see  I'm using all these extra words as an act of kindness. 

 

Submitted by fatboy74 on

Yep, that wins for me. Very good.

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello fatboy74,

Thank you for the read and generous comment.  I won't subject you to an essay.  Suffice it to say...whoa there I go again.  Ta very muchly.

Moya