Visiting Mom

Gold cherry

By Pat G

Sat, 07 Apr 2018
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23 comments
 

Where will you

sleep tonight?

 

In the spare room,

where I always go.

 

Is there any

bedding in there?

 

Yes loads. It’s fine.

 

Goodnight darling.

Night night Mom.

 

But where will you

sleep tonight?

 

In the spare room,

where I always go.

 

Is there any

bedding in there?

 

Yes loads. It’s fine.

 

Goodnight then darling.

Night night Mom.

 

Will you sleep

on the settee?

 

No, in the spare room.

 

But is there any

bedding in there?

 

Yes loads. It’s fine.

 

Goodnight then darling.

Night night Mom.

 

Hello? Who’s that?

 

It’s just me,

going for a wee.

 

Oh, what a surprise!

I’m so glad you’ve come.

 

Certificate 12
Poetry Monthly

Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

this is simple but so effective - well done

 

Submitted by Pat G on

Thank you for reading and commenting.

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

heart

Submitted by Pat G on

Thank you Philip! And it gets worse.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Shows so simply. My mother-in-law lost short term memory (not then as  acutely as this) suddenly, but long before other memory or comprehension loss, though she had always had a problem of sharing her feelings. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Pat G on

Thanks Rhiannon. It is a terrible thing.

Submitted by socialeaf on

I love this. What it truly says is all unsaid. Heartbreaking. 

 

Submitted by Pat G on

Thank you for the comment. It is a tragic and frightening condition.

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

This sad poem will mean so much to many.  It's our facebook and twitter pick of the day.  do share if you like it too.

Submitted by Pat G on

Ah. Thank you. You are right - siuch a big issue so many people have to deal with.

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Oh blimey. Yes. Very effective. Well written.

Parson Thru

Submitted by Pat G on

Thank you so much for the comments.

Submitted by Pat G on

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

This little piece tells us everything. I can imagine how these visits must take your energy and leave you feeling drained. Life goes on for as long as it does and love with it I suppose. It's very touching writing actually.

 

Submitted by Pat G on

Thank you. Yes, it is rather remorseless. Nothing seems fixed any more.

Submitted by Di_Hard on

This is so  moving. But she is still there, still responds, knows it's you, knows that you love her. You have expressed the depth of your relationship so well so simply

 

Submitted by Pat G on

Yes, there is something of her there still. Thank you for the comment.

Submitted by celticman on

yeh, captures that remebrance of things lost and people lost too in their own home and in their mind. 

 

Submitted by Pat G on

I appreciate the comments. Lost in their mine is exactly right.

Submitted by hudsonmoon on

Sad, and so loving and tender. 

Rich

 

Submitted by Pat G on

Thanks Rich. Appreciated.

Submitted by Ewan on

place, although it's just gone from my life.
This is a moving poem, remarkable in the simplicity of its concept, which only makes it all the more remarkable.

Well done.
Best
Ewan

Author Page at the 'Zon
 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

So much that should have been said, but no longer can be.