Ocean Scene

By skinner_jennifer

Tue, 09 Apr 2019
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10 comments
 

Jagged rocks

gaze out to sea

as monster wave

claws its way,

imitating huge

polar bear

easily dipping,

rising sinking...

needs to eat up

miles of sand,

 

then as it builds

to its crescendo,

pouncing froth

curling – tunneling,

residue of salty spray

like a firework display,

takes its leave as

swell subsiding

like an ocean

eiderdown.

 

 

 

Picture by pixabay free images.

 

 

 

 

 

Certificate U
Poem
Poems
Spiritual
Nature

Comments

Submitted by airyfairy on

What a  ovely image - the ocean as eiderdown.  Great contrast with the energy and movement earlier in the poem.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Really brought to mind those wonderful cliff views on a windy, stormy day, the sound of the crash and the spray you so well describe. And then the meek retreat. The children used to laugh when I said I wished I could photograph the sound of it! Thank you. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by hilary west on

Hi Jenny,

Lovely description of the sea, vivid in its depiction. Nice flow to it too if one can offer a pun !

Hilary     smiley

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Thank you for reading and your comment airyfairy. I couldn't help but be taken with how much the wave in the picture looked like a monster polar bear coming out of the ocean.

Glad you liked the bit about the ocean eiderdown. smiley

Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rhiannon,

I'm glad I could bring you closer to what I was trying to portray, it makes writing more worthwhile. I too wish I could photograph sound, but there are some incredible scenes on youtube which do give the scene a lot of drama.

Many thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts.

Jenny. smiley

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Hilary,

your comment is most welcome and thank you for the pun. wink

Jenny. smiley

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

you have evoked the feeling of the sea having an aim of its own, being alive! I love the eiderdown bit too. You have sort of wound up in the first part and in the second part all is smoothed out and withdrawing tension just like a wave, it's so clever

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hello Di,

as soon as I saw this picture I thought of waves coming alive like you said in your comment. Glad again that you captured the soul of this poem, and many thanks for letting me know, always appreciated.

Jenny. smiley

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

The poem is lovely Jenny! It also reminds me of another poem I read somewhere about waves. My late father was always talking of the sea I want to go there I want to live by the sea.

All the best! Thomas

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Tom,

I do hope you get your dream of living by the sea. There's nothing more invigorating than walking on a beach when it's windy and the salty sea air.

I'm glad you caught the wildness of my poem and thank you for letting me know and sharing your thoughts.

Jenny. smiley