Change of Scene

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Sat, 29 Jun 2019
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8 comments
 

Fine droplets of water make fogs in the sky,
but movement of air shoves them onward, they fly
– no forming of drops to go spattering down
today – as they drift off the dome’s steely frown,
replaced by the blue, and the brilliant bright light
unveiled so our star can enliven the sight.

[IP: mention three kinds of weathers, metaphorical of otherwise]

Certificate U
Poem
Miscellaneous
Humour
Nature
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

Well done!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, and for cherries. Bit of fun, nice exercise to try to describe without use of normal words sometimes! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

You've managed to tackle the I P perfectly in this poem Rhainnon.

Nice one.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jenny. It was fun to work on! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by forest_for_ever on

Brilliant, short and punchy.  You always manage to pull it out of the fire...

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Graham, short ones are more easy to make punchy! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

Very cleverly done. I enjoyed reading it.

 

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks Jean. It's nice to try to work something short and different sometimes! Rhiannon