Autumn's Fall

Cherry

By skinner_jennifer

Wed, 31 Jul 2019
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20 comments
 

Crowds no longer

mass in parks

when youngsters

go back to school,

 

all that will be left

are crows hunting,

trees standing with

occasional squirrel,

 

soon blackbird and robin

will fly into autumn's fall,

they are not bothered by

heat drifting to hotter shore,

 

I yearn for nature's promise

those days of early darkness...

longer, cozy, ideal evenings

cuddling up by an open fire,

 

that homely presence as

embers slowly disappear –

taking all our recollections

in silence now night draws near.

 

 

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Comments

Submitted by hilary west on

Hi Jenny, I liked the easy amble of this poem, particularly 'nature's promise, those days of early darkness' was very cozy, and then the final verse 'as embers slowly disappear taking all our recollections in silence now night draws near.'

Hilary      angel

 

Submitted by onemorething on

This is a gorgeous poem, very well written and the last stanza, in particular, is great. Parks, too, I hadn’t  considered, but they do empty in the autumn, nicely captured. :)

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I was intrigued by heat drifting to hotter shore, and the quietness of the parks after the beginning of the school term, and the cooler weather. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Jenny

Lovely poem, but I want more summer before the beauty of the fall. I certainly like your choice of words.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Hilary,

glad you liked this poem. I just feel so much better for writing about my favourite season. Those lines you picked out are kind of special to me, so thank you for letting me know you enjoyed.

Appreciate you stopping by to read too.

Jenny.smiley

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Many thanks for your thoughts onemorething. Isn't it great when a season can inspire? Autumn is such a magical time and I did enjoy writing this poem.

Glad you enjoyed and again thank you for reading too.

Jenny. smiley

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rhiannon,

I have definitely had enough of the sun, it just isn't my cup of tea anymore, I'm a lot happier when it's cloudy which I know might seem crazy to anyone who enjoys the sun, but for me it's a no, no. But at least it's given me inspiration to write about my favourite time of the year. smiley

Thank you for reading and your thoughts.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Jean,

I was just commenting to Rhiannon that I've had enough of summer, but I hope the sun keeps shining for you. wink

I just find walking in the heat leaves me hot and bothered and the sun just leaves me feeling like I'm constantly in need of a shower. It's not too bad when there's cloud around. 

I did enjoy writing this poem though, so I'm glad you liked and thank you for letting me know.

Jenny. smiley

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Appreciate the cherries Editors, they were a very nice surprise.

Thank you so much. smiley

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Hi Jenny, this reminds me of a piece I wrote many years ago entitled 'Do I Like Autumn?' which was very scathing about that season.
When I read it at our writers' group I was rebuked for my negative views. I had to beat a hasty retreat and wrote another expressing favourable opinions.
I now see the Fall in a different light and can appreciate your lovely poem in praise of Autumn much more.

Luigi xx

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Luigi,

I was sorry to hear of the circumstances in your writers group. Of course everyone is different and entitled to their own opinion, which is why I thought it was wrong of them to rebuke you. I'm glad you like autumn now and I'm grateful and encouraged by your words on this poem.

Many thanks.

Jenny. xx smiley

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

I like how you start off with open places, the migration of school children. In the emptiness left solitary animals and birds. But end in warmth and companionship and fullfillment

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

So glad you liked this poem Di. You were spot on with your comment and isn't it wonderful to be able to share how you feel? smiley

Thank you for reading.

Jenny. 

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Very nice Jennifer you've been experimenting with different formats for your poems this looks good. And yes the glowing embers! How incredibly romantic. It's just "in silence night draws near" I don't like that so much. 

You have terrific amounts of comments here I had to get mine in too!

Tom Brown

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Tom,

thank you for stopping by to read. I personally find it easier to think when it's dark with just maybe dim lighting to gather my thoughts by. Being able to close the doors and enjoy the peace and quiet by an open fire is so magical just staring into the flames...very inspiring.

Hope you are well and appreciated your comment.

Thanks again.

Jenny. smiley

 

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Once I had a dream exactly as you describe here it was wonderful. It was bitter cold they had a gospel thing going in some hall with a fire they invited us in me and some friend and everything everybody was so warm and friendly we felt so welcome sitting on bales of straw with steaming soup and the singing.

I'm getting carried away! Keep well x

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Tom,

I don't mind you getting carried away. Wow! That sounds like a fantastic, companionable dream. When dreams make you happy and you feel that warm close friendship, there's nothing better. Thank you for sharing your happy dream.

Jenny. smiley

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Yes imagine - From the rain and dark and icy cold and sopping wet so alone and into a big warm barn like that! It's enough to make anyone Christian!

Ok! Goodnight!

 

Submitted by hippie girl on

pretty

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

I love your name hippie girl. Thank you for reading and leaving a comment, much appreciated.

Jenny. smiley