appeal

Gold cherry

By Di_Hard

Mon, 07 Oct 2019
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16 comments
 

on amber sheen of polished wood

apricots spill, cheek soft and sweet

and from a terracotta pot

geranium flowers lift hearts

 

when days sink down in fiery sheets

then roan horses gallop, free

past rustling russet bracken slopes

down to a curve of sandy beach

 

as light-lithe goldfish wriggle out

of  catching hands, or autumn leaves'

opulent sienna, scatting

like Ella Fitzgerald's honey

voice through a trumpet's brassy wind

 

there should be more than one right way

for vowels to colour speech, meaning

escape the confines of a peel

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Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

This flows so beautifully - I would love to hear it read. I don't suppose you fancy popping down to london in November to do that? laugh

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou :0) That is really kind! I have been practicing the Wings one, but it is very long and I keep stumbling when scrolling down, and I can't get my voice to go up and down enough. Maybe should try this one as shorter. I emailed you but forgot to put it was me, sorry

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

oh yes, do try this one - the words slip together so well. Got your email and replied - I knew it was you from your other name - don't worry!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

A clever interweaving, flowing of these linked beautiful shades. I wasn't sure I understood the last line correctly. As there's no full-stop, I wondered if it is finished? [Appeal - a peel: pun?] Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou for reading Rhiannon, and your lovely comment.

It is about the comment Parson Thru made on a poem he had read aloud, when he said some people he tought in Spain didn't think he spoke proper English?Thinking about how it makes our language smaller if only one accent is allowed. And thinking that before there was the word for orange (when people started knowing about the fruit here) there were lots of different words for the colour, like gold, terracotta, apricot etc, and how much richer that must have made the language? I'm never sure anything is finished, also I can't see full stops very well either, so they seem a bit um pointless :0)

I'm sorry it isn't clear, I find it so helpful and kind of you to take the time to read and think about things. I will have another look at it tonight

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Don't worry about anything, just wondered about the 'peel' in the last line, but I think I see itis probably that enclosing the words/thoughts that they need to escape from, or basically the same as the vowels colouring - which I hadn't thought about as being partly to do with different accents, so that is interesting! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou again Rhiannon, I am so grateful to you for taking the time to think about and comment on this! If you who are so clever  didn't get it it can't be clear. Have changed "and words" in second to last line, to "meanings" hope that makes it easier to unravel.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

I love how you bring Ella Fitzgerald's voice into the poem, that is a wonderful way to describe her voice. Like her voice this poem is so relaxing and unhurried, the words just flow so easily and left me with a calm feeling.

Thank you Di.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou so much for your lovely comment Jenny, it means a lot. I am very glad if it made you calm and relaxed - that is so often how I feel when reading your beautiful poems!

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

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Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou so much! That is really kind! And thankyou for the lovely photo, too

 

Submitted by onemorething on

Beautiful, Di, full of richness and colour. :)

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou for reading and your kind comment onemorething :0)

 

Submitted by hudsonmoon on

You had me at Ella. Love Ella. Well, you had me before Ella. but it sinced the deal. Lovely.

Rich

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou so much Rich you've made my day :0)

 

Submitted by Stephen Thom on

'When days sink down in fiery sheets', wonderful on another level again Di yesyes