Muse

By skinner_jennifer

Sun, 23 Feb 2020
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This gorgeous summer's day I should be off with my sisters,

yet! in this moment I decline. I feel this kingdom my home

where I've tasted success, that you've captured its essence

with passion...of course you are just living for art and I'm your

muse to discover,

 

I wonder! Do your brush strokes convey playful thoughts? Oh!

For aspirations tormenting me when my valour is weak, flesh

succumbs to your pallet with each gaze...though you see me as

too genteel.

 

You are like a mirage in an Arabian desert, I search moist lips

wondering at wet kisses, as harboured thoughts give rise to

self-restraint, or am I too hard on myself with all this babbling?

Maybe I'm transparent as we become more comfortable,

your caution giving rise to confusion in my credulous mind.

 

 

Not sure if this is an ekphrastic poem, but thought I'd give it a go.

 

Portrait of Leonilla, Princess of Sayn Wittgenstien 1843,

by Franz Xaver Winterhalter.

 

On pixabay free.

Certificate 12
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Comments

Submitted by monodemo on

Jennifer, what can i say? I really really enjoyed that. you can tell you had fun with it

well done!

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

I'm so glad you enjoyed reading this poem monodemo. I was a bit unsure as to whether it would work, but you're right I did get a lot of pleasure writing it.

Thank you very much for letting me know.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by airyfairy on

I love the joy in language that you convey with this.  As mono said, you can tell that the writer has enjoyed herself!  

Submitted by onemorething on

I think this is great, especially your last stanza, the perspective of the muse is a very clever angle, I think. :)

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

This is great Jenny - I hope you'll have some more fun with the IP before it disappears next week

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi airyfairy,

I'm glad that the joy of writing this poem came through and thank you for letting me know.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

I'm so glad it worked for you onemorething,

I wasn't sure if it was ekphrastic, but I'm glad you liked and many thanks for sharing your thoughts.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi insert,

I'll have to get my thinking cap on and find some time to write another.

Glad you liked and thank you for letting me know.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Yes Jenny, it is indeed an ekphrastic poem as the sentiments expressed in it are definitely inspired by the languid and dreamy pose of the sitter, the princess Leonilla. I enjoyed, as other readers did, the joyful tone of the verses. I know that all writers have their own distinctive style so If I may be so bold as to make a couple of wee suggestions, I would dispense with the 'yet' at the beginning of the second line, add an 'as' to 'harboured thoughts' and I would change the enjambment on the second and third line of the last stanza to read:
"wondering at wet kisses, as harboured thoughts give rise to
self-restraint, or am I too hard on myself with all this babbling?"
They are small cosmetic changes that do not affect the overall meaning of the poem. So well done on another accomplished piece of work.

Luigi xx

 

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Thank you for your thoughts Luigi. I always appreciate help with my writing, I will look carefully at what you've told me.

Jenny. xx