Pete's Sunflower (a villanelle)
By fidud
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Pete’s Sunflower
He was a sweet and heavy-burden man,
traipsing slow burn, as dawn across the floor.
His handsome head gazed sad since worlds began.
Gravid with a life full borne. His dead pan
dignified grace shewed, all agreed, at core,
he was a sweet and heavy-burden man.
He bent and furrowed, seed in gentle hand.
Companion true to life’s longing. In awe
his handsome head gazed sad since worlds began.
A full-swelled bloom grew, faith to nature’s plan,
laden, reaching up as he dragged down, for
he was a sweet and heavy-burden man.
Pete’s body had lain long in graven land
when cumbrous gilt was fain to stoop. No more
his handsome head gazed sad since worlds began.
With autumn sigh, it fell to hoar earth and
scattered seeds as memory dreams before.
He was a sweet and heavy-burden man.
His handsome head gazed sad since worlds began.
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I must have missed this on
I must have missed this on Saturday. I love villanelles, perhaps for the slightly simplistic reason that I find repetition powerful in what I read. I admire you capacity to write one so well too as it's a skilled craft, I think, to write one that works and moves in all the right ways which this one does. Plenty of pathos and also a mythical quality about life and death and their continuance alongside the changing seasons. I can't offer you any criticism in return, I think this is thoughtful and moving. Rachel :)
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