Breakout!

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Sat, 27 Jun 2020
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8 comments
 

Tired of lockdown,
hundreds flock down
to the beach
just lust for fun
with anyone
no care
with who they share,
leave all litter
no more 'distance'
no more 'space';

others bitter
over race
discrimination
some want violence
with guilt or innocence
anger tense
hindering patience
accord
concord.

Danger of lockdown –
not just jail, lock-up,
but of reconciliation
friendship
across all differences:
hardening,
divisions locking down, locked in.

[IP: lockdown]

Certificate U
Poem
Miscellaneous
Philosophy
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

a really effective exploration of the theme - thanks!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

and for cherries. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Had to read this several times as so admiring of your wordplay was missing the meaning :0) The other night there was a program about co-writer of musical Alexander Hamilton, which reminded me of how you write, it is a rare and wonderfful gift to  make word-sound and meaning dance like this

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Di. I'm so glad you enjoy 'word-music', and feel I have some ability in that! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rhiannon,

I see you had a go at the I P this week. Lockdown seems to be affecting people in different ways. We are all so individual as humans. This is something you sum up perfectly in your poem.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jenny. It was on my mind (as you brought out in your verse) that how much to leave lockdown isn't a simple subject, and some get very frustrated and want to just have a 'no care attitude, and not think of others also, but that leads to unhappiness too. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I think it is the issue of leaving lockdown, and how much there is still danger of infection that is on our minds now, making decisions and knowing peace whatever happens. I did do a piece about surviving in lockdown earlier. Rhiannon

https://www.abctales.com/story/rhiannonw/lockdown-look