deer

Cherry

By Di_Hard

Sun, 21 Feb 2021
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12 comments
 

i used to cross slow growing moss swells

by tree masts, tossing, lichen rigged, see

in the distance dragon wings, folded

into hills. But now, words' jewellery

has gone. Nouns and verbs don't rattle

in my head like sparking beads

and there's no needle need of thought

to thread them, so, I walk through woods

at year's start, mind deer still

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Comments

Submitted by onemorething on

Gorgeous, Di. Love moss swelling, lichen rigged and still deer. I think your nouns and verbs are beautifully threaded. :)

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

THANKYOU! Have changed the last bit, like you say. Is better without the clogging it :0)

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Great poem Di,

the dragon wings folded into hills, conjures up an amazing image in my imagination.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou so much Jenny, am glad if it appealed to your imagination as your wonderful poems always spark mine!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

A lovely picture of the soggy, saturated, mossy time of year, when noting the pleasure of the landscape, but not needing to talk about it, just enjoy and show. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou Rhiannon. Was your interesting, visual poem about words that got this one going as have not had any poems for ages, am so grateful!

 

Submitted by marandina on

Succint and beautiful. Those last couple of lines "....so, I walk through woods at year's start, mind deer still." Gorgeous.

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

That's so kind of you to say, Marandina, means a lot, thankyou!

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

wow - how to add to all the admiration above? I'm not sure I can, except to say that I enjoyed this so much, thank you Di

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Am really glad to hear that, thankyou :0) I turned on my computer to delete it, as was thinking it was about nothing, so will leave it now

 

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

don't even think about deleting it! 

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Am not sure what to reply to that, except will leave it  Thankyou :0)