A sleepy mid-July mid-afternoon

Gold cherry

By Rhiannonw

Wed, 14 Jul 2021
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17 comments
 

Azure sky
green leaves lie
against the blue,
and puffs of white float by.
All is quiet except a wood-pigeon’s constant
thrusting note.
A car sweeps past,
a butterfly, white, dances
across the hedge-wall,
goose-grass is shooting up
to engulf part of it.
Tree leaves move gently in a slight breeze,
the wood pigeon has gone and the
faint further birdsong can now be heard.
Move on and up a ridge and beautiful solos of skylarks sound down.

Certificate U
Poem
Countryside explorations
Nature
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you for the cherries! Glad you enjoyed sharing the scene. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by marandina on

A beautiful meditation, Rhiannon. Nicely done :)

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, glad you thought so. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

A visual poem you should be proud of Rhiannon, I felt like I was there with you.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Oh, thank you, Jenny. I think I was writing as I saw things, - a bit like you do sometimes! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by catherine poarch on

You caught a moment beautifully. I love the sound of the wood pigeon. smiley

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks very much. I find the wood pigeons round here a bit insistent and intrusive, but I think I've got used to it. Where my mother lived there were collared doves, and I think I found their cooing a bit more soothing?! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

As Jenny says, thankyou for creating this feeling of space and movement, light and beautiful sound. Particularly liked:

"A car sweeps past,
a butterfly, white, dances
across the hedge-wall,"

also, the last line, the length, and the skylarks at the end, it's magic

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

AS usual, you give such perceptive, analytical and interesting comments, Di! Thank you! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by airyfairy on

The absolute essence of a summer's afternoon. This beautiful poem is our Facebook and Twitter Pick of the Day! Please do share/retweet if you enjoy it too. 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you so much, and so pleased that many have got and are getting pleasure from it! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

What a beautiful word picture you've painted here. Very well deserved pick!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Insert, very much appreciated. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Well done on the pick. You truly have the golden touch.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Luigi, what a nice comment! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

I agree with the others. This is a beautiful way to describe a caught moment iin time. 

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jean. I'm glad it caught on with so many. Rhiannon