suddenly

Gold cherry

By Di_Hard

Mon, 09 Aug 2021
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Grey cloud-palm presses down

crushed air 

 

trees still as puppets hanging from their strings

 

waiting

 

a hiss across  fields......

     becomes patter on leaves,,,....

                            ruffle through grass.....

                                  now! now! now!  tapping against skin

as droplets flatten with a splash!  roll out, meet others,

become a sheen of cool clarity 

 

clothing like a canvas saturated in shadow colours

heavy as a shell, yet giving no protection, welcoming

the ravishment of RAIN

 

space is a veil between trunks, green

grass, leaves, moss, lichen b-r-e-a-t-h-i-n-g

pulsing with a trillion beats

 

streams grow underfoot

puddles in parched hollows, relief as memory to a lost mind

 

everywhere, a patina of ecstacy

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Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Very descriptive of the end of gasping dryness, and the provision of moisture refreshing, satisfying! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou for commenting Rhiannon :0) I had been taking water to put in a plastic dish from home, as worried about the hedgehog I kept meeting, when all the streams dried up, but won't need to now !

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

I not only love the layout of this poem Di, but it's so satisfying to feel the coolness of your words...like:-

streams grow underfoot

puddles in parched hollows, relief as memory to a lost mind

everywhere a patina of ecstacy 

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You took me through my favourite weather, just loved all the descriptions.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Oh Jenny, it was so exciting! I don't remember hearing rain coming towards me before, though I must have seen it coming lots of t=]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]-[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[ Tina is here :0) times. I am very glad if it made you feel a little cooler, thank you so much for letting me know :0)

 

Submitted by bhi on

Vividly desctribed. This captures the progress of rain perfectly, and reminds me of the other morning when I took the dogs for a walk, and we had gone no more than 50 metres when we heard the sheeted feet of a rain storm accelerating up the road. The dogs looked at me and we all rushed under a tree just as the rain reached us. Suffice it to say, after 2 minutes the tree's foliage was sodden and provided no shelter, so we legged it home. Wonderful read.

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Ah I remember that gorgeous piece of writing! The best thing I have ever read about rain in a woods. How you describe it here is much less poetic :0) Thankyou for reading and commenting on my lesser one

 

Submitted by bhi on

Di, you are a consummate poet, and this is a great piece with so much to savour and ponder upon. When a poem asks to be re-read then that is a sign of creativity pulling and challenging, asking questions which can only be answered by further reading.

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Long way to go to there, but Thankyou so much, that is very kind coming from someone whose range and power of writing strikes awe in me!

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

This beautiful piece describing an event which I think many of us will have experienced recently is our Facebook and Twitter Pick of the Day!

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Submitted by Di_Hard on

Oh Thankyou! That is a big surprise, but very welcome! My wellies are still soggy inside :0)

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

It's so clever how you've communicated the pre-deluge drama. I love it when the dark clouds gather, everything goes quiet and the land is so thirsty. There is an otherwordly feel to this atmosphere and then, as you have desribed here, a patina of ecstasy. 

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Hi Jane, it's lovely to hear from you :0) Thankyou so much for reading and your very kind comment. I did hope no one was looking out of their window as I sloshed home

 

Submitted by marandina on

Beautiful. There's something magical about rain. The essence of life. Congrats on a well deserved POTD. Paul

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou Paul, you are very kind! I feel guilty about this one as it just splurged out like the rain wrote it :0) Agree rain often seems magical , particularly heavy rain. Even after living here so long :0) Though that was the second time this Summer I have been caught out by a sudden downpour and got utterly soaked in a few minutes, so obviously not yet learned how to read the sky! An immersive experience :0)