Simple things

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Tue, 14 Sep 2021
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15 comments
 

Busy, busy
working frenzy
rush to gym
or swim
– keep fit,
pressing stress,
stop for telly
– too long, unready
– dash, prepare
for imminent
work commintemnt:
no time to spare
to stop
for

simple things
sky, fresh air
a quiet walk
and share,
with the children talk,
reading
uncluttered stories
well told,
contemplate
unfussed illustrations
appreciate
art and skill

and so be still
feel rest unfold
less stressed.

 

Certificate U
Poem
Miscellaneous
Philosophy

Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

Well said Rhiannon!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you for the cherries! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

I found sometimes being with small children is very stressful :0) but it can also be the most joyful, and even if seems stressful at the time, looking back is a wonderful, happy memory!

I love the idea of rest unfolding, and the cosiness and fulfillment of the second part of your poem

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, I'd ben dipping into a book about busyness, and at the same time a light story, whiich mentioned something about the calm simple things and they came together in my mind! Yes, child caring can certainly be stressful, but also the quiet moments with them can typify thinking on the simple things, and calming pressurised rushong about! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by marandina on

Some of that sounds like my day just gone! Nicely done, of course Rhiannon :)

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Paul. I hope you can rest now! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rhiannon,

you have done a wonderful job with this poem. As we get older, it becomes wiser to leave the stress to the young who can cope...and it's good to be able to hand the grandchildren back at the end of the day.

I like the layout of your poem too.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jenny. Maybe we have got more used to knowing when we need to stop, and yes, we need to stop more often! But there can be much pressure on the younger to not rest and properly stop, even so called leisure and relaxation and fitness becoming stressful. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

I thought this was a clever format, which reinforced your message. I enjoyed reading it.

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jean. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by hilary west on

Hi Rhiannon,

It is very important we take time out: it is never worth it to get stressed. Very good format as well, which looked like a gyre, one end and one the other way, reflecting the two parts of the poem!

hilary   smiley

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Hilary. And it is knowing how to counteract stress and relax in peaceful things. As you say stress is counter-productive. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Staccato effect, interesting Rhianon! Very effective like your recent more experemental work.

Keep well! Tom

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Tom. I didn't realise my style was changing, I suppose I do vary and have alsways liked to be succinct and make use of alliteration for impact and memorability! Rhiannon