Tuesday Afternoon.

By celticman

Wed, 09 Feb 2022
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11 comments
 

Swat away the murky day

Clasped hands upwards to pious heaven

Exchange it for sniggering and hee-hawing

Sharp hinterlands and hard-ons

Feet that can hop and skip and jump

And not get the hump about posture

Life close to everything

Smelly feet, sweets and comics

A sister’s pal’s cool gaze to bathe in

A seaside fortress washed away

Cathedrals of deckchairs taking the sun

Calamine lotion and striped bodies

Moving themselves to be going home.

Certificate PG
Poem
A room with a Glasgow View
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Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

I love how you describe a day filled with no cares, just throwing caution to the wind, taking life easy, almost like being a young child again.

A happy poem that I enjoyed reading Jack. Good also to see you in poetry mode. smiley

Jenny.

 

Submitted by celticman on

thanks Jenny, throwing words into the air. you're the poet. I'm a grunter 

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Jack

 

I like this poem. Very nostalgic.

Jean Day

Submitted by celticman on

true Jean, a true Day. 

 

Submitted by marandina on

It feels like this poem is based on a vivid memory of a day at the beach. Some very creative lines in here. Always good to read more CM output.

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

I love the idea of swatting away the murky day!

 

Submitted by celticman on

thanks marinda and insert. more swatting of days needed. and perhaps some people as well. 

 

Submitted by Kurt Rellians on

A Glasgow View of an afternoon at the beach! You set the scene well, I can see it!

Submitted by celticman on

cheers Kurt. 

 

Submitted by Hades502 on

This poem seems familiar to me. I swear I already commented on it. Anyhow, some great word usage. You have a great ability to throw in "hard-ons," just naturally without it seeming that it has turned vulgar or that it was at all misplaced. Very good poem.

GGHades502

Submitted by celticman on

thanks hades sometimes like you I don't know what I've written, read or commented on.