Contour and wave.

Gold cherry

By lenchenelf

Wed, 27 Jul 2022
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10 comments
 

Sing an old saw of land and sea,

trade of place will ever be; no contest

for this Earth is free to shape its curve

past you or me to judge,

 

only stars above.

 

Suck of surf and lick of tide wash our

footprints, soon will hide

all trace of petty gambles, greed,

take our plastic fantasies to bed

 

where all our cunning led.

 

 

Sing an old saw of land and sea,

no quarrel and no urgency in rime

outlined on granite thrown from Vulcan’s

vaults which given time return to face

 

its maker.

 

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Comments

Submitted by celticman on

all our cunning led-- to another fine mess- as Laurel and Hardy would say. 

 

Submitted by lenchenelf on

"scratches head" :)

Cheers Jack

all the best

Lena x

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

This was so interesting, flowing and easy in all parts except the bit about plastic, as if saying just with the  rhythmn how plastic isn't part of the flow, the  cycle, made me think of the beach where everything is beautiful  and clean, except the evidence of us

 

Submitted by lenchenelf on

Middle stanza on a deliberate alternate rythmn to differentiate it and subject to the first and third.

Also Font: Trebuchet, because it amused me :)

Thanks as always for your close reading

Lena x

 

Submitted by Ewan on

remarkable work. Layers, repetition and rhymes all chime to make this fab.

E x

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Submitted by lenchenelf on

For your very generous comment. 

best to you

Lena x

 

Submitted by Ewan on

Enigmatic, layered, stacked with imagery, this is our FB and twitter pick of the day. Those who have read and enjoyed this please do the needful on SM. Ta.

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Submitted by lenchenelf on

Thank you, given the high standard of recent posts from others here, am staggered!

best and thanks

Lena x

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

Really well done. the children's rhyme style makes it all the more powerful. Congratulations on those well deserved golden cherries!

 

Submitted by lenchenelf on

well spotted, a hark back in rhythm to something I doodled in '04, posted on here in '05 smiley

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best to you

Lena x