Persephone's first day

Cherry

By Di_Hard

Thu, 16 Feb 2023
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22 comments
 

I came from darkness into darkness

 

from walls of Earth, veined halls

seeping mesh of fresh water down, along, down

sought and silent-supped by mouthless roots

spreading life's gripping secret, choice

 

behind me is close fellowship of worms, who know only feel

and burn at my touch, both fearing more heat's deep

molten sleepless iron core

wrought by those above to deadly blades

of spade and sword, shared red in our split-spilt blood

 

from cold light of inlit quartz and diamonds' birthing

into moon's sight, and dream-far stars'

possibilities going on and on 

and air - so much room to breathe in this place! Space

to run under sky's roof

 

around's become underfoot. I stop, touch ground's stillness

push pale fingers in its old old hold, and from the hole

 

Spring

 

slim shoots, and bells swell in a peal, shining

white as Night's gifts, small; snowdrops

 

make me want to grow again! Recall Hades' purple cloak

of silk so fine it would slip into my mind like wine

fill me, sate me of longing for what? I forgot

 

and now I summon memories of sumptuous imprisonment

to petals' colour, intense as a god's passion, and closed

as I, till

like an opening eye, at the world's edge, YELLOW!

 

and the first crocus unfurls to show our heart

bright as the sun

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Comments

Submitted by marandina on

"... from cold light of inlit quartz and diamonds' birthing.."

 

So many beautiful phrases in here. There's an operatic feel to this poem, Di. The final act crocuses unfurling. Spectacular. 

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou so much Paul for your lovely comment. You are right, that is how I was feeling, after seeing someone's pictures

 

Submitted by Ewan on

vivid and clear images.

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Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou very much Ewan for reading and commenting, I appreciate it a lot

 

Submitted by catherine poarch on

Beautifully led from beginning to end - from darkness to bright as the sun. Loads of thought provoking descriptions. This one stood out for me - life's gripping secret, choice. smiley

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou Catherine, you are always so kind :0) I hope you have a lovely weekend, and your story is going well!

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

so much of your imaginative, creative spirit has gone into this poem Di. You bring the story of Persephone's journey into the light from darkness to life with beautiful expression of phraseology.

A masterpiece indeed.

Jenny. 

 

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou Jenny. And for inspiring me with your brilliant descriptions of all the life underground in many of your unforgettable poems

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I've never been one for mythology, but I think I have grasped the metaphor of emerging from the dark of Hades via the dark of earth and out into so much room to breathe in this place! and the delight and wonder of the unfurling crocus – so beautiful when the sun comes out! Rhiannon

 

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou Rhiannon, for reading and commenting. I used to like myths as a child, Persephone was always my favourite one, I guess because I like plants :0) You are right, crocuses are gorgeous in the sunshine. I bought the darkest purple ones I could find and when they come out just stand goofing at them for ages :0)

 

Submitted by TJW on

You made mythology sexy.  Much obliged.

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou very much for reading and commenting :0)

 

Submitted by airyfairy on

This is really beautiful, Di, a wonderful song to the coming of spring. The Persephone myth was always one of my favourites too. And your poem captures a lot of how I feel now the days are drawing out and we're emerging from the winter darkness. Time for a bit of cautious unfurling.

Thanks for this one!

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou so much for your lovely comment Airy

 

Submitted by Penny4athought on

Movement, so beautifully done in your words, taking us from the depth, the soil, the darkness to light, from the seed to the bloom; the emergence of spring. A lovely poem and one I will enjoy reading again.smiley

Penny4athought

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou very much, Penny, that is really kind to say

 

Submitted by jeand on

HI Di

 

What a beautiful poem - such choice words - fitted iin just the right spaces to give the maximum impact

Jean Day

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou very much for your kind comment Jean :0) Take care of yourself, and good wishes for 27th XXX

 

Submitted by jeand on

Beautiful tribute to spring - wonderfully done.

Jean Day

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou so much for reading and you lovely comment, Jean, and take care of yourself

 

Submitted by jeand on

Absolutely beautiful Di.

Jean Day

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou very much Jean, you are so kind :0)