The sounds of rain

Gold cherry

By Rhiannonw

Sat, 02 Sep 2023
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19 comments
 
Rain ground-pounding
lashing,
lightning flashing
booming sound
of thunder crashing –
winds howling
gales bashing
rifting, lifting,
water standing,
cars splashing
earth soaking
drinking,
water sinking
down to roots
to feed new shoots,
empower life;
____________
 
Lullaby rain
gentle rhythm
pattering droplets’ refrain
softly strafing the thirsty earth
soaking, hydrating
wetting the wilting
all that was waiting
to drink their fill
from the fall
sweeping past
weeping down
at last. 

[IP: onomatopaeia] [This has been worked from two old pieces]

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Comments

Submitted by Penny4athought on

Loved this poetic ode to Rain, very nicely done; I can hear the rain drenching the land, quenching the thirsty earth and softly pattering on the rooftops. Enjoyed this very much.smiley  

Penny4athought

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Penny. I've always enjoyed trying to convey sounds when writing, and enjoy the sound of storm (when cosy inside) and the gentle sounds of rain outside when warm in bed! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Well done on achieving a great I. P. poem Rhiannon. I honestly wouldn't know where to start.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jenny. The IP did make me want to look through older verse, as I've often enjoyed using words like this as well as alliteratively and rhyme. We all have different styles and interests! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Nolan on

Lovely! Excellent! I think I remember those two poems.

We're waiting for our first rain of the season & Nolan

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you. One was a bit longer on its own I think! But they seemed to go together well. We have sunshine mixed with showers at the present, and temperatures rising during the day. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

Nicely done Rhiannon - what an interesting IP!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you! Yes I do love onoamtopoea and complext alltieration when suits. I think it is partly my experience of Welsh poetry partly. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you for the cherries. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Turlough on

Your great use of onomatopoeiae makes the description of dramatic weather all the more dramatic. 

And you sneaked in before me with my idea for writing, though I didn't really know where to start. It seems like here my onomatopoeiae have dried up just as our rain has.

I enjoyed reading this. 

Turlough

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks. I wanted to search back and see when onomatopoea seemed to have been useful in thinking about various things in the past. I'll probably produce some more, maybe to some extent reworked! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

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Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, that's lovely to know it's been enjoyed! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by marandina on

I love the sound of rain. You have conjured wonderful imagery here, Rhiannon. A lovely IP response. Paul :) 

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Paul. So glad you felt it worked well. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

well done! I think ALL your poems brilliantly have words which sound of their meaning. I was listening to a program about Seamus Heaney, and his poems do, too, it is a great and wonderful gift you share.
In this one, as well as the beautiful sound, what I really loved was "all that was waiting". This describes perfectly how it was in the drought this Summer, so simply. "All" being animals, insects, plants, gardeners, farmers

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Oh, thank you, Di. When I saw the IP, I did want to go back and see where I had used it, and may put up a few 'worked on' old ones during the week.  And yes I enjoyed noticing the wilting/waiting again too! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by forest_for_ever on

I loved, loved, .loved this.  One of those poems that just flows (pun intended) and well worth a golden cherry. Well done.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you so much for telling me, Graham. Rhiannon