Undertow

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By queen beatle

Mon, 09 Sep 2024
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Buried in your riverbed

I watched the clouds bear fruit

        and waited

 

        for the moon to drift downstream.

 

In grateful hope for gills, I swallowed silt unfiltered

 

        dug feet too deep to wonder if—

        stuck safe in our stagnation—

 

I'd taken our silence for peace

        displacement for my danger

                        and drowning for desire.

 

 

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Comments

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Wonderful to see you writing again Morwenna! Your poems were so spontaneous, naieve and refreshing.

I've been caught in an an undertow a few times, you can almost touch the sand so near is it, but you cannot get out. Very scary, the sea is very dangerous, a mighty lioness playing lazily with you like you're a little cub.

Your writing is beautiful.

All the best, See you! Tom Brown

 

Submitted by queen beatle on

Great to hear from you as always, Tom! Thank you for your kind words; that lioness metaphor is spot on.

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

I remember last you said your name is Welsh, an unusual name to us, we have another lady from Wales also on Abc, Rhiannon. Probably others too. Both mean "fair maiden". Rhiannon is very active. One gets the idea there are less people in Wales as the other British countries? The language seems obscure, an ancient language, but they say there are many people who can still speak it.

Good poem! Excellent! Tom

 

Submitted by queen beatle on

Is that Rhiannonw? If so, I've enjoyed her work immensely in the past. Yes, Wales is a small nation; a population of around 3 million, compared to just under 10 million in London alone! It's an odd but beautiful language, simpler than it sounds.

Always nice to hear from you, Tom!

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Yes, she. Great writer, deeply spiritual. Don't do a disappearing trick on us again!

Keep well!

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

This is our Poem of the Month - Congratulations!