Musings on my story
By Caldwell
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They say “Write what you know”. I guess that was my first mistake.
I received a call from Petros last night. A friend of over 30 years. He lives in the States. Has done all his life. You can probably tell from his name that his ancestry is from the land of myth and raki.
I had sent him a copy of the dramatically titled “The Weight of Shadows”. Thankfully he had enjoyed it but, in his generous way, he said it was filled with missed opportunities.
We talked it over for a couple of hours and there was no denying that he was right. He, the true Cretan and I, the cretin.
One of the most painfully obvious ways the story was wrong was that if this man Niko were a conductor for operatic productions in London of any worth, he would have a backbone if nothing else. I had painted him as a whimsical Hamlet, and things happened to him. He had no agency. No wild extravagance, no passion, no drive. By all accounts a bit of a wimp. On top of that, he took the idea of skipping away from the production as if he were working as some pencil pusher in a big firm. Impossible.
Then, there’s the fact that even though the ownership of firearms is under strict regulation, it would be highly unusual for there not to be villagers shooting into the sky during a festival, or any other time given what Petros said. All the road signs are shot to pieces by drunken drivers taking potshots as they fly past.
What most upset him was that every time food was present, our hero would comment that it was simply “delicious”. My goodness, what world am I living in? Food is a direct conduit to the visceral soul of a story, a spoon-fed flavoursome explosion into the mouth and mind of the reader. And someone with the character of a conductor would sink into the divine revelry of the wafts of grilled garlic broken over spit-roasted meats, crispy fresh grilled fish, and the briny soft chalk of feta cheese without leaving out of course those juicy black olives which the whole village have been farming for centuries.
He spoke of many other nuances which I have noted down carefully and I hope that I will find the time to revisit my little story and wrench it sideways with passion, pistols and Kalashnikovs, feasts and gusto.
By the end of my conversation with him, I was very envious of all the opportunities that lie in waiting for the revamped Niko. I would like a bit of this new Niko in my own life.
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Very interesting to read- I
Very interesting to read- I suppose each person you give it to is going to have a different take but I'm very pleased you're planning to revisit - definitely worth it when you have time. I think it might lend itself to a full length or a novella? and I agree about the character of Niko - it would be good to give more space to make him more three dimensional - also perhaps a little more time on the reasons why his mother left Crete
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musings are instructive. we
musings are instructive. we should be humble enough to learn from others. But we draw the lines and put the words in order. We create worlds. There's no right or wrong answers. I guess there is a getting closer to the truth. I like that.
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Feedback is always a mixed
Feedback is always a mixed blessing! I like celticman's idea of getting closer to the truth. Other people's responses are a way of pointing out the questions we haven't asked our characters yet. Of course, sometimes they need a bit cajoling before they will answer!
Keep going with it.
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