Snow

Cherry

By Ed Crane

Wed, 12 Feb 2025
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Arriving at night icy kapok drifts

to earth in silence flickering in 

lamplight like a million dying moths

forming a tapestry to cloak all.

 

Trees are changed to fairy cakes

hard corners softened by random 

curves turning cars to abandoned

hillocks and houses to fairy cots.

 

All too soon the world of pixie and

elf begins to fall apart, trees shed

their coats, cars turn into into weeping

metal, roofs sharpen, but grass hangs on.

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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Nicely described. You need an 's' on 'Tree' in the second verse? Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Ed Crane on

I' experimenting with a new computer 

I will add a picture when I've figured it out

 

Submitted by celticman on

snow is the stuff of dreams and nightmares. You've caught the dream angle. 

 

Submitted by Ed Crane on

The nightmare was figuring out how to upload the photo on this computer I borrowed from my son to learn how to use Apple Mac instead of Windows 10 which becomes obselete this year and my computer is too old to handle windows 11

The snow appeared overnight yesterday even though it was supposed to rain. it was quite a lot about 4/5 inches; Now its gone as quickly as it came ....... magic!!!!

 

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Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

This is brilliant Ed, just love the idea of cars turning into weeping metal. So many great metaphors making up this poem.

Loving it.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Ed Crane on

yes;  when snow melts on car window it looks like tears running down them.

thank you again you are very kind, Jenny x

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

This is wonderful Ed - and I really recommend a Mac. You will get used to it in no time

 

Submitted by Ed Crane on

This was my first attempt posting with the Mac. Quite different from windows which I've used since 2000. My son thinks I should use a Mac. He has several very powerful ones also Microsoft computer but he needs them as he works in 3D imaging 

I'm impressed by the quality of the Mac plus I have an iPhone so they can be friends :) 

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

This made me think of when we get someone else's delivery by mistake, and a courier comes to take it away :0) Mix up in the weather department. You caught the sudden magic really well. All your wildlife must have been very glad to see the ground again

 

Submitted by Ed Crane on

Amazon weather messed up wink

I suppose the wildlife will be pleased it didn't hang around  three years ago the river froze poor ducks were having a tough time. However the dog loved it digging around in the snow. 
thanks again 

 

 

Submitted by marandina on

Great poem, Ed. Wonderful imagery in a tightly bound universe you have created here.

 

Submitted by Ed Crane on

The snow that fell was pretty wet so it stuck to everything, even power lines, making everthing fluffy. :)

 

Submitted by jolono on

Liked this Ed. You open with drifting icy kapok. Great imagery that sets the scene for the rest of the poem. Trees looking like fairy cakes, weeping cars... whats not to like? Great poem mate.

 

Submitted by Ed Crane on

A surprise fall of snow must have made a bigger impression than I thought.

Cheers