Daddy

By chickenrun5002

Wed, 16 Apr 2008
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New here so am still trying to figure this site.

Daddy sailed the ocean
Daddy's name was Mac
He went around the world
And he always came back

Came home long enough
To do my momma in
Got her with child
and then left again

Mac came home not too often
But the last time he came
It was in a coffin.

I remember Daddy
When I was just a kid
Too bad Daddy
See what ya did?

I never got to know him
And that was a shame
But I know one thing
I still have his name.

Good ole Mac
Can't take it back
Gotta love the man
That put my mama in the sack

Sail away, sail away...Mac might come home someday.

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Submitted by animan on
This is great - very moving. I read it first in my accent and I couldn't get the feeling of it but then I checked your profile and thought let's read it to myself in my best attempt at an American accent and then I think I could feel the feeling in it. It feels like the words of a song - could it be set to music perhaps?

 

Submitted by chickenrun5002 on
Shar :) Yes it was written with a southern US accent/dialect in mind as I am from the deep south. And it was written with truth. Could be a song if I knew how to write music. But I don't. A bluesy thing might work here hey?

Shar :)

Submitted by Sooz006 on
I liked this too. This bit particulalry had an odd metre to it, is it meant to be a song? Mac came home not too often But the last time he came It was in a coffin Either way, song or poem it's a great first piece, and welcome to the site.

 

Submitted by chickenrun5002 on
Shar :)I realize that was a bit off key but it was the truth. My father died when I was four and a half years old. He died in Puerto Rico under strange circumstances. He left 7 kids behind. We have always wondered about ole Mac.. LOL :)

Shar :)

Submitted by animan on
Yes, I think a bluesy thing would work. Why not send it to your favourite singer-songwriter and see if they'll set it to music for you? Just a thought.

 

Submitted by chickenrun5002 on
Shar :) Rita Chiarelli is my fav singer. I would hope that she could do something with this song. She is fantastic at blues, Italian, etc. http://www.northernblues.com/bio_rita.html

Shar :)