The aragance to the world

By aitticboy

Fri, 25 Sep 2009
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we are one angry socity
we are all blinded by rage
we try to keep ourselve to ourselves
we bottle things up
we never tell what we think is our own

we lie to escape the truth
murder, mistrust, brutalitly
all to save ourselves
we are a bitter world
plauged by anger and greed

and we're so stressed and annoyed
we have so many pharses for it
pissed off, fucked off, annoyed
we live our lives in the hope
of bettering ourselves for death

take roadkill for an example
been hit my mechaines of our,
greed for power and advance
but we never give them a proper send off
or even give them a second glance

and love we're hopeless at love
we say you can't find the one you love
till your old and mature
well what the hell does maturaty
have to do with love at all?

we lie to protect the truth
but what if the truth
is better than a lie
and when the truth is out
"we're all just fucked"

Certificate 15
Poem
Poetry
Opinion

Comments

Submitted by Miss_D_Meaner on
An interesting poem. Full of strong emotion. A good read. I like the last two lines too.

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new julie yes I agree with Miss_D _Meaner well done you managed put on paper how your thought and feel.Unfortunately world to-day. verse I like; And love wer'e hopeless at love we say you can't find the one till your old (cheeky) and mature. Well what the hell does maturity have to do with love at all. quite right, must have compatibility like and do and say thing. might want read my "What Is Love" it's like a ladder each step up together not always so once get know each other whatever age, times careers sports situations change people, greed money,material things. reply

Submitted by Verity Valentine on
In my opinion, there is no right or wrong form of writing. (Apart from the aspect considering grammar I suppose) this is a harmless but strong opinion about love. No one entirely understands love, so nobody can be wrong about it. It's true, some people never grow up, or learn from there mistakes, at least in this case, aitticboy can reflect on your views and use that to improve his work and expand his ideas for his future work.

V. Valentine ©