Even on the dullest day …

By Rhiannonw

Fri, 15 Feb 2013
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A wishy-washy day:
brown and tired-green, and grey,
views are clammy, torporous,
ruminations misty, vacuous;
up the hill, the curtained road
by sombre woods each side enclosed;

but, stirred awake, sight of surprise! –
a trace of white, highlighting –
a scattering of branches bear
here and there
a smattering of snow:
lifting, gifting
with touch of cheer in day austere.

Certificate U
Poem
Countryside explorations
Nature

Comments

Submitted by The Walrus on
Nice piece, Rhiannonw, I particularly savoured these lines - ruminations misty, vacuous; up the hill, the curtained road by sombre woods each side enclosed;

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Thanks, glad it struck a chord! It seemed a good reminder when feeling rather dull like the weather! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by The Walrus on
It amazes me, Rhiannow, how stuff you read inspires you. I opened up a new document after I read this, and instead of staring a a blank page I had this picture in my mind of a road with woods either side, and that's how I've started my new story.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
I hope it goes well! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by scratch on
This is good again Rhiannon. The Walrus I especially liked the first stanza but then again they are both good. Nice one!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Thank you, for telling me. regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Yes the snow lights up the day with its reflection. Nice poem Rhiannon- shows you have a great love of nature. ;)Pia

Submitted by The Walrus on
Rhiannonw, I told you that your poem inspired me to start a piece of writing when I was stuck for ideas, I had this picture in my head of a misty, tree-clad road winding down a hill, well now I have several thousand words so I guess it's going to be a novel. Many thanks!

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
thank you, Pia. It was just a little realisation of the effect of the bit of snow highlighting some of the branches, as an artist might do in a painting. regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Walrus, Wow! some speed! Thank you for telling me. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Some great descriptions of nature in this poem Rhiannon. It touched the senses, I could feel and see a painting develop in this beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
And thank you for that comment, Jenny. warm regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Hello Rhiannonw, A lovely lilting flight of words. Richard LP
Richard L. Provencher

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Thank you, Richard, nice to hear from you! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

How nice to be able to find some spark of hope and light within such a dull tired green landscape.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Hi, Jean. Yes, there are days like that often in Novemeber and February, good to be reminded not to stay gloomy! Rhiannon