Betty Lou

By randy-johnson

Wed, 12 Jun 2013
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Let me tell you about a story that's certainly true.
It's about a lady who was named Betty Lou.
She went to school with my uncle and was the mother-in-law of another uncle of mine.
Everybody who knew her, knew that she was sweet and kind.

She had two children and a marriage that lasted nearly sixty years.
Now her friends and family are mourning and shedding their tears.
She had been sick for a while before she passed away.
All of her family will love her for the rest of their days.

It's always painful when a good person dies.
Betty was a Leo just like my mom and I.
Pain and grief are what her family is going through.
They're having to say goodbye to Betty Lou.

[Dedicated to Betty Lou Williams (1939-2013) who died May 27, 2013.]

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Submitted by Jonathan_Dalton on
This is nice and simple, in a good way, and I enjoyed reading it. Not sure if it matters, but grammatically I believe it should be 'just like my mum and ME' (the test I usually do is to remove the other person from the sentence and see if it makes sense - in this case, it's 'just like I' vs 'just like me'). But I'm not sure how much grammar matters, it's about the message, which was clearly communicated here. Writer, human being. www.jonathandalton.co.uk

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