24. The Trial

By chant

Sat, 03 Jan 2015
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12 comments
 

Why should the world sit in judgement
on you? Its social contract was
a cage, kept men like song birds.
You served liberty. As it is the nature
of fire to scorch, vapours to rise,
things act according to what they are.
For this they would stake your heart.
Sunlight like spilt wine on your shirt,
you in the pomp of your difference.
You tell the wool-wigged lawyers:
Compromise dilutes the blood;
my life’s an experiment in living.

@ianjmclachlan

Certificate U
Poem
A London Vampire

Comments

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

A vampire (or what this is a metaphor for) is the ultimate sociopath.   I guess all life is an experiment in living, love that line.

Submitted by chant on

thanks for your good comment Philip. chant

 

Submitted by Bee on

He does what he's made for.

Bee

Submitted by chant on

exactly. thanks Bee.

 

Submitted by Jim Archibald on

I really enjoyed this.   The essential difference between justice and law?

" Things act according to what they are" is a very inelegant line for me and snags as I encounter it.

My only complaint in an otherwise super poem.

Cheers,

Jim

Franciman

Submitted by chant on

thanks very much for your thoughts Jim, much appreciated. does "Things act according to their nature" read any better to you? chant

 

Submitted by Jim Archibald on

Much better.  It works for me.

Cheers,

Jim

Franciman

Submitted by Jim Archibald on

 

Franciman

Submitted by Geoff Smith on

It isn't easy being a vamp. I think I like this best of the vampire series poems that i have read; we view ourselves through the eyes of the vamp and find ourselves wanting.

Thanks for reading. I am grateful for your time.

Submitted by chant on

thanks for your thoughtful comment Geoff, much appreciated. chant

 

Submitted by bosch on

really good, substantive, engaging, smart

Submitted by chant on

thanks Swep. :-)