a dowry

Cherry

By celticman

Wed, 15 Apr 2015
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12 comments
 

Memories inside the track

Train filled with cinders

Empty carriages

Tossing and turning time

The coal of life burning

Firebox of hushed silences

And you afire

Curious child holding – sin seer

A can to your ear

Innocence and ignorance

Leave no scar

Dawdle and doom

And soon, so soon, so soon.

 

Doughless head for a dowry

Blob of life

Too sweet for some

Baby, we had such fire

Years and glitter of tears

Our strange affair

Glued together our heart

Pulled apart by conceit

Rumbling day and night heat

 

Matrimony

Stick legs of children

Sticky feet on the sand

Brown backs in the sun

Bickering and flight

Telephone-number fights

Glow and burn

Bend towards the grave. 

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Comments

Submitted by Geoff Smith on

My comment of yesterday seems to have vanished... v. mysterious.

I really like this poem. It's spilling over with passion and anger and loss. I don't fully understand it but I think the style really works in your hands - your spontanaeity (spelling?) of spirit.

Thanks for reading. I am grateful for your time.

Submitted by tibi popovici on

you have endowed this poem with great words, celtic! Like it! Love also irony hidden between rows smiley

Submitted by Stephen Thom on

hugely enjoyed the imagery, the level of feeling, 'a can to your ear', and the way the passage of time is portrayed, alice munro-like leaps in a poem, class

 

Submitted by celticman on

thanks guys a bit loose, but I'm no poet and I imagine a rhythm, 

 

Submitted by scratch on

Really like the train image celt.  I think that kickstarts the relentless rhythm too.

Happy Friday afternoon.

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Churring along through the tunnel of life, full of regret.

Submitted by celticman on

thanks scratch and choo too sidney.

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

This bursts with a story and imagery authentic as ever

 

Submitted by celticman on

cheers vera, apprecaiated, you know all about that. 

 

Submitted by jeand on

HI CM

Great poem. I like the train feel to it.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by celticman on

thanks jean, nice of you to say. 

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi CM

This poem is full of sadness - and yet has the pulse of a train travelling through the inevitability of life.

Jean

Jean Day