That's Not The Way I Go

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Poem of the week

By Jane Hyphen

Thu, 28 Feb 2019
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20 comments
 

 

That’s not the way I go. I go

Through the knotted hedgerows

In the folds of misty trees.

I stop to listen to the music

Spirits rustling in the blankets

Of remembered fallen leaves

 

The way I go is over quilts

Of pasture scented with the

Blooms of might have beens

Bitter perfume stings and

Still the sweet hope trails

Of ideas which still flower free  

 

On the route that I take

There’s a stage in the sky

Silver clouds are cast in flight

Dream-shifting creatures and

Faces I have known meld as

Life into imaginary life

 

On the path that I walk

There are deep caves

I wander in and through

Stop to draw the darkness

Feel the rack-wring of my conscience

To my darkness I am true

 

On the way that I go

There’s no score, no counting

Just the one two of my breaths

And a little winged-heart beat

Existing, tuning time and I   

Keep quiet and quietly not in line

 

 

 

 

 

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Comments

Submitted by HarryC on

I like the way you go, Jane.  Sounds like we often take the same path smiley

A really uplifting poem.  Beautiful.

I especially like

On the route that I take

There’s a stage in the sky

Silver clouds are cast in flight

Dream-shifting creatures and

Faces I have known meld as

Life into imaginary life

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thanks Harry, I have to confess, sometimes I go the long way just to avoid people. What with staring at the clouds, it's no wonder I never get anywhere x

 

Submitted by HarryC on

Haha!  I always go the way that's going to avoid people if I can!

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

This one is stunning Jane - thank you

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thank you - for the cherries

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Has the feel of a dreamy walk, enjoying the scents and feels, and the memories and imaginings roaming too. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Hi Rhiannon, it started off as a nature poem but it went off road. I think nature can open up parts of yourself which are locked up during the daily grind. Thanks for your comment.

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Made me think of a patchwork eiderdown made of gauzy mists, black velvet inside caves, shimmering satin clouds, thick embroidery of hedges, like reliving memories as you sew it together with words.

"The way I go is over quilts

Of pasture scented with the

Blooms of might have beens" is gorgeous!

And I liked how you can sense the power of darkness outide you, but keep yours as it's yours, from your own life.. That could have a poem all on its own.

 

But the end is a great rebellion

"Keep quiet and quietly not in line" how to survive and stay true to yourself, inside

 

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Hi Di_Hard thanks for your comment, I think I was subconsciously inspired by your last poem 'unravelling path' there are some similarities in the first verse that I just realised reading backsmiley. We've all got some darkness inside us, to deny it is to deny yourself x

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

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This beautiful poem is our facebook and twitter pick of the day - do share.

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

This is also our poem of the week - Well done!

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thanks so much for this. My boss died from a stroke this morning, it was very sudden, he always went his own way so it's a silver lining on this cloudy St David's day - he also loved Wales.

 

Submitted by celticman on

I think you/ve caught it jane, what I'm not sure, but I like it. 

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thank you celticman x

 

Submitted by sean mcnulty on

 this is such a memorable and beautiful poem. And also , you drew me to di hard's poem in your comments. Its amazing too. Wonderful poetry going on here at abctales. And jazz communique

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thanks Sean, that is a lovely compliment.

 

Submitted by seashore on

I love poems that make you think, and feel, as this one does.
Thank you.

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Hi seashore, it's so good to hear that the words resonate with you. Thanks for your comment.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

 

sorry I'm late to your poem Jane, I can't believe I missed such a significant piece of writing. There's so much value to this poem, it's like a gentle meditation that leads the reader down a path of natures beauty.

I can't pick out a favourite stanza, the whole poem is just perfect.

If it was a painting it would be a masterpiece.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thanks for your lovely comment Jenny. It's very inspiring to receive such positive feedback.smiley