Hi! I'm new and would like feedback.

Hi everyone, I'm new to ABC tales and new to writing as well. I've done one very short piece so far, and you can find it here:

http://www.abctales.com/node/545839

I'd really appreciate any feedback you guys have, as I'm looking to improve myself as a writer. English was never my best subject at school so you'll have to forgive the poor grammar, but it will improve with time, I'm sure.

Are Welsh trains pulled by sheep?

I was just doing a bit of research for something I'm writing, and I discovered that if I wanted to travel from Aberystwyth to Swansea today after 8pm, it would take nearly 11 hours...

http://www.thetrainline.com/Time_Table/QTT_Display_Timetable.asp

!?!!?!!?!?!!?!?!?!? WHAT ?!?!!?!?!?!?!!!!?!!

Just thought I'd share that...

*** pepsoid ***

The Hyenas by chant

I like this - because it's very very clear as to what it's trying to say:

http://www.abctales.com/story/chant/the-hyenas

...and it says it very well.

But is poetry meant to be this transparent?

Faceless Parts One and Two by 27

I like these.

They tell a story well from the first person and that is not easy. They tell it so well that it may even be true - or you think it might, which is more important.

http://www.abctales.com/node/545700

http://www.abctales.com/story/27/2005-faceless-part-two

This is conventional writing at its best.

Your thoughts?

Thanks

I have never flagged one of my own peices before but I'm doing it now, because the opportunity to do it under the name 'Enzo' will never happen again, and I don't think I'll be around for a while.

I just wanted to thank you all, because this peice doesn't really cover how much I've appreciated the kind words and support over the last couple of years.

http://www.abctales.com/story/enzo/titled-self-indulgence-enzo-or-a-cunn...

Seeya!

Ben..

Trippy, man....

http://www.patmedia.net/marklevinson/cool/cool_illusion.html

p.s. best not to close the window after, use Back instead.

I've just found something new on ABC

If you click on the country in someone's profile it lists everyone from that country who is a registered user. It also gives you all the photos that people have uploaded.

That's fun now!

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